Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples, avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I am good at memorizing things because I read regularly, which helps improve my memory. Additionally, I use various learning techniques that enhance my ability to remember information effectively.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary to express your feelings and the situation more naturally.

예시: Yes, last month I was very busy preparing for my final exams at McCaven University, so unfortunately, I forgot my mother's birthday. This was quite embarrassing and disappointing for me as her son.

제안: Your answer is a bit vague and repetitive. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words to make your answer more structured and natural.

예시: In daily life, I need to remember my tasks and goals for the day. Therefore, I always write a to-do list to organize what I need to accomplish today and plan for the next day.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and natural by avoiding repetition and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: To remember important things, I usually write notes in my notebook and on my phone. Additionally, I set alarms to remind me of important tasks or events.

× Yes, I'm good at memorizing the things like I used to read a lot so that is why I have a good memory and with my reading skills and some learning skills, I have a good memory learning skills.

✓ Yes, I'm good at memorizing things because I used to read a lot, so that is why I have a good memory. With my reading and learning skills, I have good memory skills.

The phrase 'memorizing the things like I used to read a lot' is awkward and incorrect. 'Memorizing things' is sufficient without 'the'. Also, 'like' should be replaced with 'because' to show cause. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity. 'Memory learning skills' is incorrect; it should be 'memory skills' or 'learning skills'.

× Yes, last month I was so busy with my final examination at Mccaven University so I forgot about my mother's birthday that that was so embarrassing for me and so disgraceful as a son.

✓ Yes, last month I was so busy with my final examination at Mccaven University that I forgot my mother's birthday. That was so embarrassing for me and so disgraceful as a son.

The sentence had a run-on structure and incorrect conjunction use. 'So' should be replaced with 'that' to correctly link cause and effect. Also, 'forgot about my mother's birthday' is better as 'forgot my mother's birthday'. The repeated 'that' was an error. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× In your daily life, a person should remember what to do and what your goals should be in your day like in your day and what should you have to achieve in your life.

✓ In daily life, a person should remember what to do and what their goals should be each day, and what they need to achieve in life.

The sentence inconsistently switches between 'your' and 'a person'. Pronouns should be consistent; here, 'a person' pairs with 'their' as a gender-neutral pronoun. Also, 'like in your day' is redundant and awkward. The sentence was rephrased for clarity and pronoun consistency.

× And even I always remember and always write the things I need to do in this day and for the next day.

✓ I always remember and write down the things I need to do today and for the next day.

The phrase 'And even I always remember' is awkward; 'I always remember' is sufficient. 'In this day' should be 'today' for natural English. 'Write the things' is better as 'write down the things'. The sentence was simplified for clarity and correct tense usage.

× In my case, I used to do the writing in my notebook and even make notes in my phone to remember things.

✓ In my case, I usually write in my notebook and even make notes on my phone to remember things.

'Used to do the writing' is awkward and incorrect; 'usually write' is more natural for habitual actions. 'Make notes in my phone' should be 'make notes on my phone' because 'on' is the correct preposition for devices.

× Even I said some alarms and even some of the notes alarms.

✓ I also set some alarms and some note alarms.

'Even I said some alarms' is incorrect; the verb 'said' is wrong here. The correct verb is 'set' for alarms. 'Some of the notes alarms' is awkward; 'note alarms' or 'alarms for notes' is clearer. The sentence was corrected for verb choice and clarity.