Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your method of remembering tasks with specific details.

예시: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. Therefore, I rely on my phone and write down tasks on paper to help me remember what I need to do each day.

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Begin with a direct response, then provide a specific example using linking words like 'for example' or 'once'. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will make your answer more natural.

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, once I forgot a dentist appointment and only remembered it suddenly while I was doing some work with my cousin.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then explain with specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'silly things'.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember important things like where I put my motorcycle keys and the tasks I have to complete. To help with this, I use my phone and write notes on paper to stay organised.

제안: Your answer should be more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your method with specific details and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: I remember important things by using my phone. I save important numbers and reminders, and I regularly check my phone to see if there are any tasks I need to complete.

× I often forget the things that I had to be done in my day, in my life.

✓ I often forget the things that I have to do in my day, in my life.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'had to be done' which is past perfect passive, but the context requires present tense to express habitual actions. Using 'have to do' correctly indicates ongoing or habitual tasks.

× So I just go through some remember in my phone and go through a piece of paper to write my task on it.

✓ So I just go through some reminders on my phone and go through a piece of paper to write my tasks on it.

The phrase 'some remember' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'reminders'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to items stored on a phone. 'Tasks' should be plural to match the context.

× I just forgot an appointment or for dentist I just remember when I am doing some other works with my cousin I just suddenly remember that oh I just forgot that the interview with my dentist.

✓ I just forgot an appointment with the dentist; I only remembered it when I was doing some other work with my cousin. I suddenly remembered that I had forgotten the interview with my dentist.

The phrase 'for dentist' is incorrect; it should be 'with the dentist'. 'Works' should be singular 'work' as it is uncountable here. Also, tense consistency is important: past tense 'was doing' and 'remembered' fit the narrative of a past event.

× In my daily life, I usually forget all silly things like where my motorcycle keys get over what the things I have to do in my life.

✓ In my daily life, I usually forget silly things like where my motorcycle keys are or what things I have to do.

The phrase 'get over' is incorrect here; 'are' is the correct verb to indicate location. 'All silly things' is better as 'silly things' for natural expression. 'What the things' should be 'what things' to be grammatically correct.

× I always lay on my phone to get active and I just write it on a paper to organize my daily life.

✓ I always spend time on my phone to stay active and I just write it on a paper to organize my daily life.

The verb 'lay on my phone' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'spend time on my phone'. 'Get active' is better expressed as 'stay active' in this context.

× I spend more time with my phones, so I just get my number in my phone to stay updated.

✓ I spend more time with my phone, so I just save my numbers in my phone to stay updated.

'Phones' should be singular 'phone' unless referring to multiple devices. 'Get my number' is unclear; 'save my numbers' is more appropriate to indicate storing contacts.

× I always check my phone whether there is any task or even that I can complete in this time.

✓ I always check my phone to see whether there are any tasks that I can complete at this time.

The phrase 'whether there is any task or even that I can complete in this time' is awkward. 'To see whether there are any tasks' is clearer. 'At this time' is the correct prepositional phrase for indicating the current moment.