Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "Is I'm" and "I use made a stick new." To improve, focus on clear sentence structures and correct vocabulary. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising things, especially dates and numbers. For instance, I often remember people's names and their facial features because I pay close attention to details. Moreover, I use techniques like associating new information with images and mnemonics, which help me retain information better.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has repetition and incomplete sentences, such as "once I once forgot" and "So from so I learned to be more." To improve, avoid redundancy and complete your thoughts clearly. Use linking words to show cause and effect.

예시: Yes, I once forgot to take one of my children to a vaccination appointment. I felt really terrible because I knew how important it was. Fortunately, I called the clinic immediately and rescheduled the appointment. From this experience, I learned to be more careful with important dates.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing, such as "kids appointment" and "husband schedule." To improve, use possessive forms correctly and vary your vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember my kids' appointments with the doctor and their outdoor activities because they are important. Additionally, I have to keep track of my husband's schedule, which helps me coordinate our plans effectively.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases like "I said remainder." To improve, use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, organize your answer with linking words for better flow.

예시: I use my smartphone to set reminders for important tasks. Additionally, I use alarms and Google Calendar's To-Do List to keep track of my schedule. This method helps me remember important things effectively.

× Is I'm quite good at memorizing things, especially dates and numbers.

✓ I'm quite good at memorizing things, especially dates and numbers.

The sentence incorrectly starts with 'Is I'm', which is a sentence structure error. The correct form is simply 'I'm' to express the statement. Removing 'Is' corrects the sentence structure.

× I use made a stick new, such as associating new information with similar images and mnemonics, which helps me to retain new information more.

✓ I use mnemonic tricks, such as associating new information with similar images and mnemonics, which helps me to retain new information better.

The phrase 'made a stick new' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student intended to say 'mnemonic tricks' or similar. Also, 'retain new information more' is awkward; 'retain new information better' is more appropriate. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× once I once forgot to take off or take one of my children to a vaccination appointment with the doctor.

✓ once I forgot to take one of my children to a vaccination appointment with the doctor.

The phrase 'take off or take one of my children' is incorrect. 'Take off' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The past tense verb 'forgot' is correct, but the sentence needs to remove 'take off' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× So from so I learned to be more.

✓ So from that experience, I learned to be more careful.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'that experience' and completing the thought with 'I learned to be more careful' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× In my daily life, I need to remember my kids appointment with the doctor as well as the appointment with the outdoor activities since I know how important it was.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember my kids' appointments with the doctor as well as appointments for outdoor activities since I know how important they are.

'Kids appointment' should be plural possessive 'kids' appointments' because it refers to multiple children and multiple appointments. Also, 'appointment with the outdoor activities' is incorrect; it should be 'appointments for outdoor activities'. The verb 'was' should be 'are' to match plural subject and present tense.

× Moreover, I have to remember my husband schedule so it helps me to coordinate our plans effectively and remembering these things.

✓ Moreover, I have to remember my husband's schedule so it helps me to coordinate our plans effectively and remember these things.

'My husband schedule' should be possessive 'my husband's schedule'. Also, 'remembering these things' should be parallel with 'helps me to coordinate' and corrected to 'remember these things' for grammatical consistency.

× I use smartphones so I said remainder for important task as well as I use alarms and moreover I use Google Calendar To Do List to keep track of my schedule.

✓ I use my smartphone to set reminders for important tasks, as well as alarms, and moreover, I use Google Calendar and To-Do List to keep track of my schedule.

'I said remainder' is incorrect; it should be 'I set reminders'. 'Smartphones' should be singular 'my smartphone' if referring to personal device. 'Important task' should be plural 'important tasks'. Also, 'Google Calendar To Do List' should be separated as 'Google Calendar and To-Do List' for clarity.

× Yeah this is the way I I remember my important things.

✓ Yeah, this is the way I remember important things.

The sentence has a repeated word 'I I' which is a sentence structure error. Removing the duplicate 'I' and adding a comma after 'Yeah' improves clarity and correctness.