Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'you know' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'get fetch good marks', say 'achieve good marks'. Keep your answer concise and clear.

예시: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, during my college days, I memorised many theoretical subjects which helped me achieve good marks.

제안: Avoid filler words and repetition to improve fluency. Use linking words like 'however' appropriately and ensure clarity in your sentences. Instead of 'showing up, uh, up up to him', say 'apologised to him'. Also, try to be more specific about how you made it up.

예시: Yes, I once forgot my father's birthday, which was very embarrassing. However, I made it up to him by apologising and giving him a surprise gift.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'In both my professional and personal life, I need to remember my work tasks and my toddler's routine.'

예시: I need to remember my daily work tasks that must be completed by the end of the day. Additionally, in my personal life, I keep track of my toddler's routine.

제안: Avoid filler phrases like 'you know' to sound more confident. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words. For example, say 'I write important tasks in my notebook to ensure I don't forget them, which helps me organise my day effectively.'

예시: I write down important tasks in my notebook every day. This helps me remember them and organise my work efficiently.

× I like to memorize a lot of, uh, theoretical subjects and get fetch good marks for myself.

✓ I like to memorize a lot of theoretical subjects and get good marks for myself.

The phrase 'get fetch good marks' is incorrect because 'fetch' is unnecessary and wrongly used here. The correct phrase is 'get good marks'. Removing 'fetch' corrects the sentence.

× it was a very embarrassing moment for myself.

✓ it was a very embarrassing moment for me.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used here. Reflexive pronouns should be used when the subject and object are the same. Here, 'me' is the correct object pronoun.

× I have made-up to him by showing up, uh, up up to him, umm, and giving a surprise gift also.

✓ I have made it up to him by showing up and giving a surprise gift as well.

The phrase 'made-up to him' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'made it up to him'. Also, 'showing up up to him' is redundant and incorrect; 'showing up' suffices. 'Also' is better replaced with 'as well' for smoother flow.

× I need to remember my list of work that I have to complete it by the end of the day.

✓ I need to remember my list of work that I have to complete by the end of the day.

The sentence has redundancy with 'that I have to complete it'. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary because 'list of work' is already the object. Removing 'it' corrects the sentence structure.

× And in the professional side and in the personal side, I usually remember, uh, my toddler's routine.

✓ And on the professional side and on the personal side, I usually remember my toddler's routine.

The correct preposition to use with 'side' in this context is 'on', not 'in'. Using 'on the professional side' and 'on the personal side' is grammatically correct.

× I have a notebook which states that things to do and I jot down my important things to do for that day so that, you know, I don't forget it in the later part of the day.

✓ I have a notebook which states the things to do and I jot down my important tasks for that day so that, you know, I don't forget them later in the day.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because it refers to multiple 'things'. The correct pronoun is 'them'. Also, 'states that things to do' is awkward; 'states the things to do' is better. 'Important things to do' can be improved to 'important tasks' for clarity.