Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ содержит повторения и некоторые грамматические ошибки, такие как "to be to be honest" и "enormous of stories". Рекомендуется избегать повторов, использовать правильные предлоги и более точные выражения. Также стоит завершать предложения, чтобы ответ был полным и логичным.

예시: To be honest, I'm not very good at memorizing things because I often lose focus when my friends are speaking. For example, recently a friend told me many stories, but I couldn't remember any of them. I think this happens because I need to concentrate better.

제안: В ответе есть ошибки в построении предложений, например, "I can not give me the permission" и нечеткое использование времен. Рекомендуется использовать более простые и правильные конструкции, а также связующие слова для плавности речи.

예시: Actually, I never allow myself to forget something important because I always write down important things in an app or in my phone notes. This helps me stay organized and remember everything throughout the day.

제안: Ответ слишком длинный и содержит повторения, например, "stay to keep my healthy skin". Рекомендуется использовать более четкие и краткие предложения, а также связующие слова для логичности.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember to follow my skincare routine every morning and evening to keep my skin healthy and fresh. Also, exercising daily is very important to help me feel energetic.

제안: В ответе есть небольшие ошибки в согласовании времен и грамматике, например, "helped me" и "don't forget" в одном предложении. Рекомендуется использовать согласованные времена и более точные выражения.

예시: Recently, I started using an app called Tick Tick, which helps me stay organized and not forget any important tasks during the day. I can also set notifications at any time so I won't miss anything significant.

× To be to be honest, I'm not quite good at memorizing things because I can not focus on the speech of my friends.

✓ To be honest, I'm not quite good at memorizing things because I cannot focus on the speech of my friends.

The phrase 'To be to be honest' contains a repeated conjunction 'to be' which is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'To be honest'. Also, 'can not' is better written as 'cannot' as one word in formal English.

× For example, recently my friend told me enormous of stories but I couldn't even remember one of the stories.

✓ For example, recently my friend told me an enormous number of stories but I couldn't even remember one of the stories.

The phrase 'enormous of stories' is incorrect because 'enormous' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. The correct phrase is 'an enormous number of stories' to quantify the stories properly.

× I think it is due to my focus and I need to concentrate more when I.

✓ I think it is due to my lack of focus and I need to concentrate more when I listen.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'Due to my focus' should be 'due to my lack of focus' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'when I' is incomplete and needs an object or verb to complete the thought, such as 'when I listen'.

× Actually I can not give me the permission to forget something important because I keep the rule that I need to write down any important things to my app or to my notes in the phone.

✓ Actually, I cannot allow myself to forget something important because I follow the rule that I need to write down any important things in my app or notes on my phone.

The phrase 'can not give me the permission' is incorrect modal verb usage. The correct expression is 'cannot allow myself'. Also, 'to my notes in the phone' should be 'notes on my phone' for correct preposition use.

× So I want to be organized throughout the day and don't forget something important.

✓ So I want to be organized throughout the day and not forget anything important.

The phrase 'don't forget something important' is better expressed as 'not forget anything important' to maintain parallel structure and correct negation.

× In my daily life, by all means I personally think that I need to keep up with my skin care routine which is in the morning and in the evening to stay to keep my healthy skin and also stay fresh throughout the day and also the exercise is the most important factor of my day to become energetic.

✓ In my daily life, I personally think that I need to keep up with my skincare routine in the morning and evening to maintain healthy skin and stay fresh throughout the day. Also, exercise is the most important factor for me to become energetic.

The phrase 'by all means' is unnecessary here and disrupts sentence flow. 'Skin care' is better as 'skincare' as one word. 'Stay to keep my healthy skin' is awkward; 'maintain healthy skin' is clearer. 'The exercise' should be 'exercise' without 'the'. 'Factor of my day' is better as 'factor for me'. Sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences.

× Recently I started using an app called Tick Tick which helped me stay organized and don't forget anything important tasks throughout the day and also I can put a notification to any time of the day so I won't forget anything significant and crucial for me.

✓ Recently, I started using an app called Tick Tick which helps me stay organized and not forget any important tasks throughout the day. Also, I can set notifications at any time of the day so I won't forget anything significant and crucial to me.

The sentence is too long and contains incorrect conjunction use. 'Helped' should be 'helps' to match present relevance. 'Don't forget' should be 'not forget' to maintain parallel structure. 'Put a notification to any time' is incorrect; 'set notifications at any time' is correct. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity.