Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有重复。建议简化表达，使用更自然的句型，并避免冗余。

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things, especially difficult content. When I was a child, I found it hard to remember what I learned in class.

제안: 回答内容具体，但表达不够连贯，语法和用词有误。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意时态和词汇的准确性。

예시: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I once left my phone in a restaurant. When I realized it, I went back to check, and sometimes I found it, but sometimes I didn't.

제안: 回答中有重复和表达不清的问题，且部分词汇使用错误。建议理清思路，避免重复，使用准确词汇表达日常计划的重要性。

예시: I need to remember my daily schedule because I often forget what to do next. Keeping track of my plan helps me stay organized.

제안: 回答较为自然，但有些语法错误和重复。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I usually write important things in my phone's apps because it's convenient. I check them often and repeat the information to help me remember.

× I was not a talent guy when I made this reciting content in my memory in my childhood in the classroom.

✓ I was not a talented guy when I memorized this reciting content in my childhood in the classroom.

这里“talent”应使用形容词“talented”来修饰“guy”，表示有才华的人；“made this reciting content in my memory”表达不自然，应该用“memorized”表示记忆内容。动词时态用过去式“was”和“memorized”符合句子描述的过去时间。

× I have just forgotten my phone in the restaurants.

✓ I have just forgotten my phone in the restaurant.

“restaurants”是复数，但这里指的是具体的某一家餐厅，应该用单数“restaurant”。

× Yeah, I just have to view it.

✓ Yeah, I just had to check it.

这里描述过去发生的事情，动词时态应使用过去式“had to check”，且“view”用法不当，应该用“check”表示查看。

× And when I got off the restaurant I found my phone was gone and I just go back to check.

✓ And when I left the restaurant, I found my phone was gone and I just went back to check.

“got off the restaurant”表达不正确，应该用“left the restaurant”；“go back”应使用过去式“went back”，因为描述的是过去的动作。

× Sometimes I found it, sometimes not.

✓ Sometimes I found it, sometimes I did not.

句子缺少主语和谓语，应该完整表达“sometimes I did not find it”，这里简化为“sometimes I did not”也可以。

× Well, absolutely my daily plan, you know, I always forget what I have to do the next step and I can't always struggle with my data plan.

✓ Well, absolutely my daily plan, you know, I always forget what I have to do next and I always struggle with my daily plan.

“the next step”用法不自然，改为“next”；“can't always struggle”表达错误，应该是“always struggle”；“data plan”应为“daily plan”，前后保持一致。

× So the first thing and the most important thing I need to remember is my daily, daily play.

✓ So the first and most important thing I need to remember is my daily plan.

“daily play”应为“daily plan”，且重复“daily”不必要。

× It helps me know what I have to do next time.

✓ It helps me know what I have to do next.

“next time”通常指下一次，而这里应指下一步任务，使用“next”更合适。

× Oh, important thing I gotta write down in my phone's apps.

✓ Oh, important things I gotta write down in my phone's apps.

“important thing”应为复数“important things”，因为通常记下多件重要事情。

× And really, it's really convenient, you know, uh, I can always check them repeatedly and in case I may remember them, yes, and also I've got to repeat it again to remember it's in my brain.

✓ And really, it's really convenient, you know, uh, I can always check them repeatedly in case I forget, and also I've got to repeat them again to remember them in my brain.

“in case I may remember them”用法错误，应该是“in case I forget them”；“repeat it”应为“repeat them”，保持代词与复数一致；“remember it's in my brain”表达不自然，改为“remember them in my brain”。