Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat natural but could be more concise and structured. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'usually' and try to directly answer the question first, then add supporting details. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things, so I usually write down my tasks for the day to help me remember them.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using linking words and breaking it into shorter sentences for clarity. Also, try to add a brief reflection or result to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, once at work, I received an email to complete a task, but I forgot about it. As a result, I had to work late to finish it and send it to the client on time.

제안: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Try to directly answer the question with a topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and be more specific.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember important work tasks and personal habits, such as maintaining a healthy diet and staying active.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete at the end. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' to sound more confident.

예시: I usually make a list of important tasks for the day, which helps me complete them on time and efficiently.

× I usually do not have a good memory skill.

✓ I usually do not have good memory skills.

The noun 'skill' should be plural 'skills' because 'memory skills' refers to the ability in general, which is countable in plural form here.

× Usually I note down the things which I need to do on that specific day.

✓ Usually I note down the things that I need to do on a specific day.

The phrase 'on that specific day' is less natural here; 'on a specific day' is more appropriate to indicate any particular day. Also, 'which' is better replaced by 'that' in restrictive clauses.

× Yes, this happened at my workplace once.

✓ Yes, this happened at my workplace once.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× I received a mail to finish a task, but I forgot to do it and I had to sit long hours even after my working hours and finish the task and send it to the client.

✓ I received an email to finish a task, but I forgot to do it, so I had to work long hours even after my working hours to finish the task and send it to the client.

'Mail' should be 'email' for clarity. The sentence is long and needs commas and conjunctions for clarity. 'Sit long hours' is unnatural; 'work long hours' is better. The phrase 'and finish the task and send it' is better connected with 'to' to indicate purpose.

× Important things which is related to the work and personal things I would say something which we need to stay healthy and the eating habits these are the things I would prefer to remember every day and the in the work I would say important message which.

✓ Important things which are related to work and personal things. I would say things that help us stay healthy, like eating habits. These are the things I prefer to remember every day. At work, I would say important messages.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. 'Things which is' should be 'things which are' for plural agreement. 'Message' should be plural 'messages' if referring generally. The sentence is broken into clearer parts for better understanding.

× Usually I list things which are important and the things which I need to perform on that specific day.

✓ Usually I list things that are important and things that I need to perform on a specific day.

'Which' is better replaced by 'that' in restrictive clauses. 'On that specific day' is better as 'on a specific day' for generality.

× As a result, I could finish those things on time and efficiently, and also, uh, the things which I would want to remember I.

✓ As a result, I can finish those things on time and efficiently. Also, I try to remember the things I want to.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'I could finish' is better as 'I can finish' to indicate habitual action. The last part is incomplete and needs rephrasing for clarity.