Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子较长且有些重复。建议使用更简洁的句子结构，避免重复表达，同时增加一些具体细节，使回答更自然流畅。

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things naturally. However, I have developed a habit of making lists to help me remember important tasks, which has been very effective.

제안: 回答中有重复和口语化表达，建议用更正式和连贯的语言表达，并减少重复。同时可以增加具体的例子来丰富内容。

예시: Yes, I often forget important things. For instance, I once left my assignment at home before going to school. Because of this, I always use a memo app on my phone to keep track of my tasks.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但句子结构较为简单且有些口语化。建议使用更正式的表达，避免重复“and”，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I need to remember many things daily. As a student, I have to learn textbook material, and as a daughter, I prepare breakfast for my mother. Sometimes, I feel overwhelmed, which causes me to forget some tasks.

제안: 回答中重复使用“like I said”，显得不够自然。建议直接陈述方法，并用连接词丰富句子，同时避免重复。

예시: I usually make lists or use a memo app on my phone to keep track of important tasks. This method helps me stay organized since I tend to forget things easily.

× I'm not a person that has a good memory, but in order to memorize things I started this habit of tracking things down on a list and making a list for everything I need to remember.

✓ I'm not a person who has a good memory, but in order to memorize things I started this habit of tracking things down on a list and making a list for everything I need to remember.

The relative pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used for people; 'who' should be used instead to refer to a person. This is a common singular/plural and pronoun usage issue.

× ...but in order to memorize things I started this habit of tracking things down on a list and making a list for everything I need to remember.

✓ ...but in order to memorize things I have started this habit of tracking things down on a list and making a list for everything I need to remember.

The present perfect tense 'have started' is more appropriate here because the habit started in the past and continues to the present. Using simple past 'started' suggests the action is completed and not ongoing.

× Definitely all of the time.

✓ Definitely, all the time.

Adding a comma after 'Definitely' improves clarity and naturalness. Also, 'all the time' is the correct fixed phrase rather than 'all of the time' in spoken English.

× For example, if I'm at school, I might say, Oh my God, I forgot my assignment when I left my home, I might say, oh, I forgot my key.

✓ For example, if I'm at school, I might say, 'Oh my God, I forgot my assignment when I left home.' I might also say, 'Oh, I forgot my key.'

The sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation and quotation marks for direct speech. Also, 'my home' is better as 'home' in this context. Proper punctuation clarifies meaning and improves sentence structure.

× So definitely I'm a really forgettable person.

✓ So definitely, I'm a really forgetful person.

'Forgettable' means something that can be forgotten by others, while 'forgetful' describes a person who often forgets things. The correct adjective here is 'forgetful'. Also, a comma after 'definitely' improves flow.

× So that's why, like I said, I need like a list, a memo on my phone to keep track of things.

✓ So that's why, like I said, I need a list, a memo on my phone to keep track of things.

The repeated use of 'like' is unnecessary and informal. Removing the second 'like' makes the sentence clearer and more grammatically correct.

× I'm still a student, so I have to memorize all of the textbook knowledge.

✓ I'm still a student, so I have to memorize all the textbook knowledge.

The phrase 'all of the' is often unnecessarily wordy; 'all the' is more natural and concise. This is a minor plural/quantifier issue.

× And I'm also a daughter, so I have to remember to make breakfast for my mom.

✓ And I'm also a daughter, so I have to remember to make breakfast for my mother.

Using 'mom' is informal; 'mother' is more appropriate in formal or semi-formal speech. This is a style choice rather than a strict grammar error, but improves clarity and tone.

× And sometimes I feel really overstimulated and that makes me forget things.

✓ And sometimes I feel really overstimulated, and that makes me forget things.

Adding a comma before 'and' separates the two independent clauses, improving sentence structure and readability.

× Like I said before, I like to make a list, or in other words, make a memo on my phone to keep track of what things I need to remember for today.

✓ Like I said before, I like to make a list, or in other words, make a memo on my phone to keep track of the things I need to remember today.

The phrase 'what things' is awkward here; 'the things' is more natural. Also, 'for today' can be simplified to 'today' for smoother flow.