Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中有较多的语气词和犹豫词，影响流畅性。建议减少“umm”“uh”等填充词，回答时结构更清晰，表达更自然。

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things because since I started studying science subjects, I feel my memory has declined a bit.

제안: 回答内容较简单，缺少细节和连贯的连接词。建议补充更多细节，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: Yes, once I forgot that we had to return to school on a Sunday. As a result, my teacher called my father, which was quite embarrassing for me.

제안: 回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词有误。建议简化句子结构，明确表达需要记住的具体内容。

예시: As a high school student, I need to remember Chinese poems for tests, as well as my class schedule and lunch time.

제안: 回答较为完整，但可以增加连接词使句子更流畅，同时丰富词汇。

예시: Sometimes, I make a list or write things down on paper to help me remember. Additionally, I often ask others to remind me when necessary.

× my memory, umm, seemed to be, uh, falling behind.

✓ my memory, umm, seems to be, uh, falling behind.

这里描述的是现在的状态，应该使用一般现在时态'seems'，而不是过去时'seemed'。

× once our school needed to return to school on Sunday but I forgot it so my teacher called my father so it was awkward.

✓ once our school needed to return to school on Sunday but I forgot it, so my teacher called my father, and it was awkward.

句子中缺少逗号和连接词，导致句子结构不清晰。添加逗号和'and'使句子更通顺。

× The high school student, umm, I need to remember some Chinese poems that I need to do the detection and of course the time, the time I have classes and the time I have lunch, that it is must be memory.

✓ As a high school student, umm, I need to remember some Chinese poems that I need to recite and, of course, the times I have classes and lunch; that must be memorized.

原句中'the high school student'应为复数或用作身份描述，且'do the detection'表达不准确，应改为'recite'。'the time'应改为'times'以匹配复数。句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。

× Sometimes I will make a list or write them down on a paper to remember them, and sometimes I will ask others to remind me.

✓ Sometimes I will make a list or write them down on paper to remember them, and sometimes I will ask others to remind me.

'on a paper'中的冠词'a'不必要，通常表达为'on paper'，表示在纸上写。