Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，且有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: No, I am not very good at memorising things because I often forget information and need to review it many times to remember.

제안: 回答中信息表达不够清楚，语法和用词有误。建议明确说明忘记的事情和原因，并用连接词使句子连贯。

예시: Yes, last year I forgot my mom's birthday because I had the wrong date, which made me feel really bad.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但表达重复且有语法错误。建议简洁表达并避免重复，同时使用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I need to remember many things daily, such as my phone number, home address, and my friends' and family's birthdays.

제안: 回答不够清晰，句子结构混乱且重复。建议直接说明记忆重要事情的方法，并用简单明了的句子表达。

예시: To remember important things, I focus carefully and repeat the information several times until I can recall it easily.

× I think no, because I always need too much time to remember some knowledge, because I always forget this, so it is very difficult for me.

✓ I think no, because I always need too much time to remember some knowledge, and I always forget it, so it is very difficult for me.

这里的句子中使用了两个“because”，导致句子结构重复且不流畅。应使用连词“and”连接两个相关的原因，使句子更通顺。

× I study time, I always need to remember again and again to.

✓ When I study, I always need to remember again and again.

原句中“study time”用法不当，且句尾的“to”多余。应改为“When I study”表示“当我学习时”，并去掉多余的“to”。

× Yes, last year I forgot my mom's birthday because they always use wrong birthday so I forget it and I remember a wrong time so it is really bad.

✓ Yes, last year I forgot my mom's birthday because they always used the wrong birthday, so I forgot it and remembered the wrong date, so it was really bad.

“they”指代不明确，且时态不一致。应将“use”改为过去式“used”，保持时态一致；“forget”改为过去式“forgot”；“remember”改为过去式“remembered”；“time”改为“date”更合适。

× I think I need to remember too many things in my daily life. I need to remember my mobile phone number and my home, so I need to also remember my friends and my family's birthday time birthdays.

✓ I think I need to remember too many things in my daily life. I need to remember my mobile phone number and my home address, and I also need to remember my friends' and my family's birthdays.

“home”应具体为“home address”；“birthday time birthdays”重复且用法错误，应改为“birthdays”；“friends”所有格应为“friends'”。

× Actually I need to remember too much time, but actually I think if I need to want to remember important things, I can remember it quickly and I always need to remember sometimes that I can remember it.

✓ Actually, I need to spend a lot of time remembering, but I think if I want to remember important things, I can remember them quickly, and sometimes I just need to review to remember them.

“need to remember too much time”表达不当，应改为“need to spend a lot of time remembering”；“if I need to want to remember”结构混乱，应改为“if I want to remember”；“I can remember it”中的“it”应改为复数“them”以对应“important things”；句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。