Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence due to pauses and incomplete sentences. Try to give a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words to make your response more natural and effective. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating the same idea multiple times.

예시: No, I am not very good at memorising things nowadays because my short-term memory has weakened. However, I used to be better at memorising when I was in school, but now I rarely need to memorise anything.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and has some repetition which affects clarity. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, provide specific details to enrich your answer and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I have often forgotten important things. For example, last week I forgot my best friend's birthday, which was quite embarrassing. I think this happens because my short-term memory is not very reliable these days.

제안: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to finish your thoughts fully and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about other things you need to remember in daily life to enrich your response.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember several things, such as eating three meals a day. Lately, I have been careless and often skip meals, which has negatively affected my health. Besides that, I also need to remember appointments and deadlines.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence due to unfinished sentences. Try to provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words. Also, complete your sentences to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: Since my memory is not very reliable, I write down important things to remember. Whenever I feel like I might have forgotten something, I check my phone where I keep all my notes and reminders.

× I have a very short term memory and I tend to forget about most of the things.

✓ I have a very short-term memory and I tend to forget most things.

The phrase 'short term memory' should be hyphenated as 'short-term memory' because it is a compound adjective describing 'memory'. Also, 'most of the things' is incorrect; it should be 'most things' to correctly express the plural without unnecessary articles.

× So I would say that I. I'm not good at memorizing things.

✓ So I would say that I am not good at memorizing things.

The sentence is fragmented with an unnecessary period after 'I'. It should be combined into a complete sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I used to be good at memorizing things when I was in school, but now I don't have anything to. Memorize.

✓ I used to be good at memorizing things when I was in school, but now I don't have anything to memorize.

The sentence is incorrectly split with a period after 'to'. The verb 'memorize' should be connected to 'to' as an infinitive verb form without interruption.

× I think I have. Grown a very short memory.

✓ I think I have grown a very short memory.

The sentence is incorrectly split with a period after 'have'. Also, 'grown a very short memory' is acceptable but 'short-term memory' is more idiomatic. The split should be corrected to maintain sentence flow.

× Yes, a lot of the time I have forgotten forgotten about things that I was supposed to remember forms.

✓ Yes, a lot of the time I have forgotten about things that I was supposed to remember.

The word 'forgotten' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, the word 'forms' at the end is extraneous and should be removed for clarity.

× For instance last week it was my best friends birthday and I forgot about it.

✓ For instance, last week it was my best friend's birthday and I forgot about it.

The phrase 'best friends birthday' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'best friend's birthday'.

× I really don't know why but I have grown a very short term memory and.

✓ I really don't know why but I have grown a very short-term memory.

Again, 'short term memory' should be hyphenated as 'short-term memory'. The sentence is incomplete with an unnecessary 'and' at the end which should be removed.

× I couldn't even remember my.

✓ I couldn't even remember it.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'my'. It should be completed with an object like 'it' to make sense.

× I think there are quite a few things which I need to remember in my daily life.

✓ I think there are quite a few things that I need to remember in my daily life.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'which' is better replaced by 'that' in restrictive clauses in spoken English for clarity.

× For example, I would say that I have to eat 3 meals a day and I have been very careless with my health lately and I often skip meals once or twice a day which has been really bad for my health as I have.

✓ For example, I would say that I have to eat three meals a day, and I have been very careless with my health lately. I often skip meals once or twice a day, which has been really bad for my health.

The sentence is too long and run-on. It should be split into two sentences for clarity. Also, numbers under ten are better written in words ('three'). The ending 'as I have' is incomplete and should be removed.

× As I have told earlier, my memory has grown quite short and I forget about the important things.

✓ As I have told you earlier, my memory has become quite short and I forget important things.

The phrase 'As I have told earlier' is missing an object; it should be 'told you earlier'. Also, 'has grown quite short' is better expressed as 'has become quite short'. 'Forget about the important things' is better as 'forget important things'.

× But to remember the most important things in my life, I would write them down and if I ever felt like that I'm missing something, I would just look into. My phone where I keep all my.

✓ But to remember the most important things in my life, I write them down, and if I ever feel like I'm missing something, I just look into my phone where I keep all my notes.

The sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'Look into. My phone where I keep all my.' is incorrect. It should be combined and completed properly. Also, tense consistency is important; 'would write' and 'would just look' should be present tense 'write' and 'look' to match habitual action.