Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免无关内容，直接回答问题并提供具体例子。

예시: Yes, I am quite good at memorising important dates like my parents' birthdays and my children's special events. I also remember special plans well.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，直接说明忘记的事情及原因，并适当使用连接词。

예시: Yes, I once forgot my wedding anniversary because I was very busy with work. As a result, my wife was upset with me.

제안: 回答内容不够清晰，句子结构混乱，建议简化表达，明确列举日常需要记住的具体事项。

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember to take care of my child, such as picking them up from kindergarten on time and helping them with their homework.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简洁明了地说明记忆方法，并使用连贯的句子。

예시: To remember important things, I usually write them down on paper or use the calendar app on my phone. This helps me get reminders when needed.

× Memorizing somethings you special in some important days for this theory morning such as my parents birthday, my children's pretty and so on.

✓ Memorizing some special things on important days like my parents' birthdays, my children's birthdays, and so on.

这里'somethings'是复数形式错误，应该用'some things'表示一些事情；'my parents birthday'缺少复数所有格，应为'my parents' birthdays'；'my children's pretty'表达不清，推测为'birthdays'，应改为'my children's birthdays'。

× Memorizing somethings you special in some important days for this theory morning such as my parents birthday, my children's pretty and so on.

✓ Memorizing some special things on important days like my parents' birthdays, my children's birthdays, and so on.

介词使用错误，'in some important days'应改为'on important days'，表示在某些特定的日子。

× Yeah, and I think the most important things I have for corporate use my an anniversary with my wife because as I say, I was busy with my jobs and so I didn't remember that day has come.

✓ Yeah, and I think the most important thing I have to remember is my anniversary with my wife because, as I said, I was busy with my jobs and so I didn't remember that day had come.

'the most important things'应为单数'thing'，因为指的是最重要的一件事；'my an anniversary'中'an'和'my'重复，去掉'an'；'that day has come'时态不对，过去时应为'that day had come'。

× Yeah, and I think the most important things I have for corporate use my an anniversary with my wife because as I say, I was busy with my jobs and so I didn't remember that day has come.

✓ Yeah, and I think the most important thing I have to remember is my anniversary with my wife because, as I said, I was busy with my jobs and so I didn't remember that day had come.

'as I say'应为过去时态'as I said'，因为描述过去的情况；'that day has come'应为过去完成时'that day had come'，表示过去某时之前的动作。

× Every day is, for example, I should remember that every day I would give a peer of way to Mindy if to match to my child.

✓ For example, every day I should remember to give way to Mindy when I go to pick up my child.

'give a peer of way'错误，应为'give way'；'if to match to my child'表达不清，推测为'when I pick up my child'，介词使用错误。

× And also I should remember that the time that I should pick up after the kindergarten and so on.

✓ And also I should remember the time I should pick up my child after kindergarten, and so on.

'pick up after the kindergarten'介词使用错误，应为'pick up my child after kindergarten'，表示在幼儿园之后接孩子。

× Actually speaking, maybe for some really important things or cruel things, I will write down on my papers You, specially you Lord, is with the help of with the phone I can keep something in the calendar's electronic calendars.

✓ Actually, for some really important things, I will write them down on paper. Especially with the help of my phone, I can keep them in electronic calendars.

'write down on my papers'应为'write them down on paper'；'You, specially you Lord'无意义，应删除；'with the help of with the phone'重复介词，应为'with the help of my phone'；'keep something in the calendar's electronic calendars'表达重复，应为'keep them in electronic calendars'。

× Actually speaking, maybe for some really important things or cruel things, I will write down on my papers You, specially you Lord, is with the help of with the phone I can keep something in the calendar's electronic calendars.

✓ Actually, for some really important things, I will write them down on paper. Especially with the help of my phone, I can keep them in electronic calendars.

代词使用错误，'write down'后应有宾语'them'，而不是省略；'You, specially you Lord'不合适，应删除。

× In this way it will remains me when the time comes out.

✓ In this way, it will remind me when the time comes.

'remains me'错误，应为'remind me'；'when the time comes out'中'adverb placement'不当，'comes'后不需要'out'，应为'when the time comes'。