Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and provide specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things because I often recall my childhood activities and experiences, which helps me retain information effectively.

제안: Your response is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on answering directly, use complete sentences, and provide specific examples. Use linking words to explain your points logically.

예시: Yes, sometimes I forget important things, such as upcoming events or schedules sent by my company, which can cause me to miss appointments.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks structure. Try to clearly state what you need to remember daily, explain why, and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember my work tasks and deadlines because sometimes I have a heavy workload, which makes it easy to forget important things.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and disorganized. Try to answer directly, explain your method clearly, and use linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid repetition and irrelevant details.

예시: I used to write important things on paper, but now I use my phone to set reminders because technology makes it easier to remember important tasks.

× Just 'cause I'm bored in memory thing, 'cause I'm I'm reminded everything.

✓ Just because I'm bored with memory things, I'm reminded of everything.

The phrase 'Just 'cause' is informal and 'in memory thing' is incorrect; 'because' is the correct conjunction and 'with memory things' is the proper prepositional phrase. Also, 'I'm reminded everything' lacks the preposition 'of'. Use 'reminded of everything' for correct meaning.

× Just 'cause I'm bored in memory thing, 'cause I'm I'm reminded everything.

✓ Just because I'm bored with memory things, I'm reminded of everything.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'with' when expressing being bored by something. Also, 'reminded everything' requires the preposition 'of' to be grammatically correct.

× My childhood. My childhood activities. I have good memories.

✓ My childhood and my childhood activities. I have good memories.

The original sentences are fragmented; combining them improves clarity. 'Memories' is plural and correctly used here.

× Yeah, sometimes to happen I'm forgotten organ with some important things.

✓ Yeah, sometimes it happens that I forget some important things.

The phrase 'I'm forgotten organ' is incorrect; the correct past tense form is 'I forget'. Also, 'to happen' should be 'it happens' to indicate occurrence.

× So like my. Schedule event my my. Companies sending me in next week sometime.

✓ So like my scheduled events, my company sends me information about next week sometimes.

'Schedule event' should be plural 'scheduled events' to match context. 'Companies' should be singular 'company' if referring to one employer. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I'm forgetting a timetable.

✓ I forget the timetable.

The present continuous 'I'm forgetting' is incorrect here; the simple present 'I forget' is appropriate for habitual actions.

× Yeah, I need to some left less than more work workload or sometime I'm.

✓ Yeah, I need to have less workload, or sometimes I am...

The phrase 'some left less than more work workload' is incorrect; 'less workload' is the correct quantifier usage. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for quantifier use.

× Much work load on my shoulder so that's why I'm sometimes forgotten everything.

✓ I have much workload on my shoulders, so that's why I sometimes forget everything.

'Workload' is one word. 'On my shoulder' should be plural 'on my shoulders'. 'I'm sometimes forgotten' is incorrect; the active form 'I sometimes forget' is correct.

× Initially, I was right on the paper.

✓ Initially, I wrote it on paper.

'I was right on the paper' is incorrect; the past tense verb 'wrote' is needed to indicate the action of writing.

× Nice painting.

✓ Nice handwriting.

'Painting' is incorrect in this context; 'handwriting' is the appropriate noun to describe writing on paper.

× No, no, it, it, it is a technology era.

✓ No, no, it is the technology era.

Repetition of 'it' is unnecessary. 'The technology era' requires the definite article 'the'.

× So every, every everyone has a have a phone.

✓ So everyone has a phone.

Repetition of 'every' and 'have a' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'everyone has a phone'.

× So I'm not trained in the phone important thing.

✓ So I note important things on the phone.

'Trained in the phone important thing' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'note important things on the phone'.

× So that's easy to me remind.

✓ So it's easy for me to remember.

The phrase 'easy to me remind' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'easy for me to remember'.