Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Та илүү тодорхой, товч бөгөөд байгалийн хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Давтагдсан үгсийг арилгаж, зөв бүтэцтэй, холбоос үг ашиглан хариултаа сайжруулна уу.

예시: I am not very good at memorizing things unless I visualize them in my mind. When I create mental images, I can remember information much faster and more effectively.

제안: Хариулт тань ойлгомжгүй, алдаатай байна. Илүү тодорхой, логик дараалалтай, алдаагүй өгүүлбэрээр хариулж, шаардлагатай бол холбоос үг ашиглаарай.

예시: Yes, this year I forgot to wish my mother a happy birthday, and she was very upset. I think my father usually reminds me, but he was not around this time.

제안: Хариулт тань ойлгомжгүй, утга санаа тодорхой бус байна. Илүү энгийн, тодорхой үг хэллэг ашиглан, логик холбоос үгтэй, алдаагүй өгүүлбэрээр хариулна уу.

예시: I often forget to take care of myself, so I remind myself every day to love and prioritize myself before others. This helps me stay balanced and healthy.

제안: Хариулт тань тодорхой боловч алдаатай, утга санаа бүрэн илэрхийлэгдээгүй байна. Илүү цэгцтэй, алдаагүй, холбоос үгтэй хариулт өгнө үү.

예시: I usually write important things on my iPad and place reminders on my home screen so I don't forget them. This method helps me remember important tasks every day.

× I would say I am not really good at memorizing without like visualizing at my mind in my mind.

✓ I would say I am not really good at memorizing without visualizing in my mind.

The phrase 'visualizing at my mind in my mind' is redundant and incorrectly uses the preposition 'at'. The correct form is 'visualizing in my mind' because we visualize something inside our mind, not 'at' it. Also, repeating 'in my mind' is unnecessary.

× And to memorize things I try to visualize visualize in my mind.

✓ And to memorize things, I try to visualize them in my mind.

The sentence repeats the word 'visualize' unnecessarily and lacks an object for the verb 'visualize'. Adding 'them' clarifies what is being visualized. Also, a comma after 'things' improves readability.

× And if I visual, if I visualize him it just memorize really quick.

✓ And if I visualize, it just memorizes really quickly.

The verb 'visual' is incorrect; it should be 'visualize'. The pronoun 'him' is unclear and unnecessary here. 'Memorize' should be in third person singular form 'memorizes' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'quick' should be the adverb 'quickly' to modify the verb properly.

× And this year, in 2025, I forgot to say happy birthday to my mother on her birthday and she was really mad at me.

✓ This year, in 2025, I forgot to say happy birthday to my mother on her birthday, and she was really mad at me.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity. The tense usage is appropriate.

× And I acquired my father found dead because he should have remind me her birthday.

✓ I found out that my father was dead because he should have reminded me of her birthday.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Acquired' is incorrect; 'found out' is appropriate. 'Found dead' needs to be in passive past tense 'was dead'. 'Remind' should be past participle 'reminded' after 'should have'. Also, 'remind me her birthday' should be 'reminded me of her birthday' to use the correct preposition.

× I would say I always forgot to love myself before everyone, so I need to remind myself every single day that I have to learn myself.

✓ I would say I always forget to love myself before everyone, so I need to remind myself every single day that I have to love myself.

'Always forgot' is incorrect because 'always' suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'forget' is better. 'Learn myself' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'love myself'.

× I have to choose my tooth myself before anyone.

✓ I have to choose my path myself before anyone.

The phrase 'choose my tooth' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the intended word is 'path' or 'way'. This correction assumes the intended meaning is about making personal choices.

× Because that kind of person that would tries really hard to give everyone there my love so.

✓ Because that kind of person would try really hard to give everyone their love.

'Would tries' is incorrect; 'would' should be followed by the base verb 'try'. 'There' is a wrong pronoun; it should be 'their' to indicate possession.

× And it allowed myself.

✓ And it allows me to love myself.

'Allowed' is past tense but the context suggests present tense 'allows'. 'Myself' is a reflexive pronoun and cannot be the subject; 'me' is correct here. The sentence is incomplete and unclear, so adding 'to love myself' clarifies the meaning.

× I would try to write on my iPad and then I put them in my home screen so I don't forget them.

✓ I try writing on my iPad and then put them on my home screen so I don't forget them.

'Would try' suggests conditional or habitual past, but the context is present habit, so 'try writing' is better. Also, 'in my home screen' should be 'on my home screen' because we put icons or notes on a screen, not in it.

× Because I usually forget really important things.

✓ Because I usually forget really important things.

This sentence is grammatically correct but is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence for completeness.

× Every single day I will forget my. Notebooks took pink school.

✓ Every single day, I forget my notebooks that I took to school.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I will forget my.' is incomplete. 'Notebooks took pink school' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correction clarifies the intended meaning and corrects sentence structure.