Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，导致意思难以理解。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使用正确的时态和词汇，并且逻辑要连贯。

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things because I tend to forget quickly. However, my high school teacher taught me to organise information like a knowledge tree and remember it step by step, which helps me improve.

제안: 回答中表达不清楚，句子结构混乱，词汇使用不当。建议用简单明了的句子描述事件，注意时态和逻辑关系。

예시: I once forgot my mother's birthday because I was busy with important tasks. To make up for it, I bought a gift with money I earned myself to show my care and make her happy.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，使用连接词使内容连贯，并注意词汇的准确性。

예시: I think carrying my ID card is very important because it proves my identity in many situations. Also, remembering my parents' birthdays and preferences shows my love and makes them feel special.

제안: 回答较为清晰，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更自然流畅。建议丰富细节，使用更准确的词汇。

예시: It depends on the situation. For important dates like my parents' birthdays, I use a reminder app on my phone so I can check anytime. For knowledge like language skills, I write notes on paper to help me remember better.

× I don't think Amazon they could add memorizing because I always remember things slowly and forget it the more quickly.

✓ I don't think I could add memorizing because I always remember things slowly and forget them more quickly.

句中“Amazon they”使用不当，且“forget it”中的代词应与复数“things”一致，改为“forget them”。建议去掉多余的代词，保持代词与先行词一致。

× But my high school teacher told us a good way to help me which is. Organize the knowledge as a Knowledgetree firstly and then remembered them step by step.

✓ But my high school teacher told us a good way to help me, which is to organize the knowledge as a knowledge tree firstly and then remember them step by step.

“remembered”应为动词原形“remember”，因为前面是“to organize... and then remember”，两个动词应保持一致。建议注意动词形式的一致性。

× I once forgot my mother's birthday due to some important tasks and the same time to make up for age, I bought a message machine with the morning earned by myself for my mom to show my care and relieve her pain.

✓ I once forgot my mother's birthday due to some important tasks, and at the same time, to make up for it, I bought a message machine with the money I earned by myself for my mom to show my care and relieve her pain.

“the same time”应为“at the same time”，“make up for age”应为“make up for it”，“morning”应为“money”，“earned by myself”前应加主语“I”。建议注意固定搭配和词汇选择。

× I think I'm carrying my ID card is is very important in my daily life becauses really crucial to prove my identity in different situations.

✓ I think carrying my ID card is very important in my daily life because it is really crucial to prove my identity in different situations.

“is is”重复，应删去一个；“becauses”拼写错误，应为“because”；句中缺少主语“it”，指代“carrying my ID card”。建议注意拼写和主谓一致。

× The second thing is ENT remember parents birthday and their preferences and not only can show our love for them but also can make them feel special and happy.

✓ The second thing is to remember parents' birthdays and their preferences, which not only can show our love for them but also can make them feel special and happy.

“ENT”应为“to”，缺少不定式标志；“parents birthday”应为复数所有格“parents' birthdays”；句子结构不完整，需用“which”引导从句。建议注意拼写、所有格和句子结构。

× Well, I think it depends on different situations. If at some important dates like my parents birthday I will write them down in a reminder app on my phone because I can check in anytime and anywhere.

✓ Well, I think it depends on different situations. If there are some important dates like my parents' birthdays, I will write them down in a reminder app on my phone because I can check it anytime and anywhere.

“If at some important dates”缺少主语，应加“there are”；“parents birthday”应为复数所有格“parents' birthdays”；“check in”用法不当，应为“check it”。建议注意句子完整性和固定搭配。

× But if it's some knowledge like language skills, I will write them on the page.

✓ But if it's some knowledge like language skills, I will write it on the page.

“knowledge”是不可数名词，代词应为“it”而非“them”。建议注意代词与先行词的一致性。