Part 1
시험관
Are you good at memorising things?
수험생
No, since I was a child I always forget everything, especially my own business. When I was in primary school I forgot my keys, house keys a lot of time and I have to wait outside for my mother let me in.
시험관
Have you ever forgotten something important?
수험생
Yes, last summer vacation I forgot my passport in the hotel, which was very important because I had a flight to catch this mistake almost. Cost me to Mr. Flight but luckily I managed to get it back in time. It was a stressful experience and since then I always double check my belongings before leaving.
시험관
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
수험생
As a student I need to remember to do my homework everyday because it helps me improve my skills and make me get good grades which I can. Applicant a good university.
시험관
How do you remember important things?
수험생
I would like choose take notes because I find it easier to see something that I write and then I memorized these things in my head.
Are you good at memorising things?
점수: 65.0제안: 回答时应更自然流畅,避免语法错误和重复表达。可以简洁直接地回答问题,并用具体例子支持。
예시: No, I have never been good at memorising things. For example, when I was in primary school, I often forgot my house keys and had to wait outside for my mother to let me in.
Have you ever forgotten something important?
점수: 70.0제안: 回答应更连贯,避免语法错误,使用连接词使内容更流畅,并具体描述事件。
예시: Yes, last summer I forgot my passport at the hotel, which was very important because I almost missed my flight. Fortunately, I managed to get it back in time. Since then, I always double-check my belongings before leaving.
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
점수: 60.0제안: 回答应更清晰,避免语法错误,使用连接词使句子更连贯,并具体说明原因。
예시: As a student, I need to remember to do my homework every day because it helps me improve my skills and get good grades, which are important for applying to a good university.
How do you remember important things?
점수: 65.0제안: 回答应更自然,避免语法错误,使用连接词使表达更流畅,并具体说明方法。
예시: I like to take notes because I find it easier to remember things when I write them down and review them later.
× No, since I was a child I always forget everything, especially my own business.
✓ No, since I was a child I have always forgotten everything, especially my own business.
这里使用了表示从过去持续到现在的动作,应该用现在完成时态'have forgotten',而不是一般现在时'forget'。
× When I was in primary school I forgot my keys, house keys a lot of time and I have to wait outside for my mother let me in.
✓ When I was in primary school I forgot my house keys many times and I had to wait outside for my mother to let me in.
'a lot of time'用法不当,应该用复数形式'many times'表示多次。'have to'应改为过去时'had to',因为描述的是过去的事情。'for my mother let me in'缺少不定式'to',应为'for my mother to let me in'。
× last summer vacation I forgot my passport in the hotel, which was very important because I had a flight to catch this mistake almost.
✓ Last summer vacation I forgot my passport in the hotel, which was very important because I almost missed my flight because of this mistake.
'had a flight to catch this mistake almost'语序混乱,且时态不正确。应改为'almost missed my flight because of this mistake',表达更清晰且时态正确。
× Cost me to Mr. Flight but luckily I managed to get it back in time.
✓ It almost cost me my flight, but luckily I managed to get it back in time.
原句结构混乱,缺少主语和谓语,且表达不清晰。应补充主语'It',并调整语序使句子通顺。
× since then I always double check my belongings before leaving.
✓ Since then I have always double-checked my belongings before leaving.
表示从过去持续到现在的动作,应该用现在完成时'have double-checked',且'double check'作为动词短语应连写为'double-check'。
× I need to remember to do my homework everyday because it helps me improve my skills and make me get good grades which I can.
✓ I need to remember to do my homework every day because it helps me improve my skills and get good grades, which will help me.
'everyday'是形容词,表示日常的,应该用副词短语'every day'表示每天。'make me get'表达不自然,改为'get'即可。句尾'which I can'不完整,改为'which will help me'更合适。
× Applicant a good university.
✓ apply to a good university.
'Applicant'是名词,句中应使用动词'apply',且搭配介词'to',完整表达申请大学的意思。
× I would like choose take notes because I find it easier to see something that I write and then I memorized these things in my head.
✓ I would like to choose to take notes because I find it easier to see something that I write and then memorize these things in my head.
'would like'后应接不定式'to choose','choose'后也应接不定式'to take notes'。'memorized'应为一般现在时'memorize',因为描述的是习惯动作。