Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, tránh ngắt quãng và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I used to be very good at memorising things when I was a child because my family thought I had a special ability. However, as I grew older, my memory skills have gradually declined.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn bị ngắt quãng và thiếu thông tin cụ thể. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý. Sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I forgot to submit the application form for an important competition two months ago because I was careless. As a result, I missed the chance to participate, which made me feel very disappointed.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

예시: In my daily life, I need to remember to manage my time well so that I can focus on personal development and hobbies like coding and playing games with my friends.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngắt quãng và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I use several methods to remember important things. For example, I immediately write notes because I know I might forget. Additionally, I use online applications to help me stay organized.

× Well, when I was a young child, I. Used to be able to memorize things very, really well.

✓ Well, when I was a young child, I used to be able to memorize things really well.

The original sentence incorrectly splits 'I used to be able to memorize' into two parts with a period, causing a sentence fragment. The correction combines them into one coherent sentence. This is a sentence structure error because the verb phrase was improperly separated.

× But as I age on that kind of challenge, just fade away.

✓ But as I age, that kind of challenge just fades away.

The original sentence uses 'fade' without the third person singular 's' and has awkward phrasing. The subject 'that kind of challenge' is singular, so the verb should be 'fades'. Also, 'age on' is incorrect; 'as I age' is correct. This is a present tense and subject-verb agreement issue.

× Sorry. Used to be able to memorize.

✓ Sorry, I used to be able to memorize.

The original sentence is a fragment missing the subject 'I'. Adding the subject and connecting the sentence properly corrects the structure.

× Yes, I did. It was two months ago where there was a very important competition that. I should have taken part in but.

✓ Yes, I did. It was two months ago when there was a very important competition that I should have taken part in, but I didn't.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. 'Where' should be 'when' for time reference. The sentence is incomplete and lacks the final clause. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.

× Because of my. Forgetfulness I've. Missed the application form and I feel.

✓ Because of my forgetfulness, I've missed the application form and I feel bad about it.

The original sentence is fragmented with misplaced periods. Combining into one sentence with proper punctuation corrects the structure.

× As a person who likes to focus on. His own personal development and hobbies. Are usually. Focus my day on improving myself and studying the activities that I like, such as.

✓ As a person who likes to focus on his own personal development and hobbies, I usually focus my day on improving myself and studying the activities that I like, such as coding and playing games with my friends.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack a clear subject in the second sentence. Combining into one coherent sentence fixes the structure.

× Coding and playing games with my friends. I have a lot.

✓ I have a lot of hobbies, including coding and playing games with my friends.

The original sentences are fragmented and disconnected. Reordering and combining them into a complete sentence improves clarity and structure.

× I tried to apply many ways.

✓ I have tried many ways.

The original sentence uses simple past 'tried' but the context suggests ongoing experience, so present perfect 'have tried' is more appropriate.

× Until organizing my work.

✓ Until I organize my work.

The original phrase is a fragment missing subject and verb. Adding 'I organize' completes the sentence.

× For me, I will use notes to takedown important things immediately because I know that I will forget it.

✓ For me, I will use notes to write down important things immediately because I know that I will forget them.

'Takedown' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'write down'. Also, 'forget it' should be 'forget them' to agree with plural 'things'. This is an incorrect preposition and pronoun use issue.

× A few minutes later I also use online applications which leads you organized.

✓ A few minutes later, I also use online applications which help you stay organized.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Leads you organized' is incorrect; 'help you stay organized' is correct. Adding commas improves readability.