Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives specific examples, but there are some repetition and minor grammatical errors ("it it hits up", "hits up" should be "heats up"), and one sentence is slightly long. Improve coherence by using a clear topic sentence, a linking word for examples, and correct verb forms. Also avoid repeating words and keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I really like the air fryer in my kitchen because it cooks food quickly and evenly. For example, I often bake banana bread, cookies and brownies in it, and it heats up fast while giving consistent results. Additionally, it uses less oil than traditional methods, so I use it almost every week.

제안: Good main idea, but grammar and word choice need polishing ("specially" → "especially", "people or person" → "people who", awkward phrasing). Add a reason with linking words and a brief specific example to strengthen the answer and make it more natural and concise.

예시: Yes, I think they are very important, especially for people who live alone and have limited time. For instance, an automatic washing machine saves hours of hand-washing, and a robotic sweeper keeps the floor tidy without any effort, so people can relax on weekends.

제안: The answer communicates the idea but has repeated words ("so so", "the the") and grammatical errors ("read the instruction" → "read the instructions", "ruin or broken it" → "ruin or break it"). Use a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting reasons, and correct verb forms. Keep it concise and use linking words like "because" or "so that."

예시: Yes, if I use a machine for the first time I always read the instructions because I want to know how to operate and maintain it properly. This helps me avoid breaking the machine and ensures I use it safely.

제안: Your answer is clear but contains repetition and some awkward wording ("it it", "ensures the use of safety and efficiently"). Improve accuracy by using correct collocations ("ensure safety and efficiency") and a concise structure: topic sentence + two brief reasons with linking words.

예시: Yes, reading the instructions is important because they explain how to use and maintain equipment correctly. Therefore you are less likely to damage the device, and you can operate it safely and efficiently.

× I recently bought it because I've been baking a lot, for example banana bread, cookies and brownies, and it it hits up quickly and gives consistent results.

✓ I recently bought it because I've been baking a lot, for example banana bread, cookies and brownies, and it heats up quickly and gives consistent results.

The original used 'hits up' which is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'heat up' and in third person singular present it becomes 'heats up'. This is a verb form error related to correct base verb and -s ending for third person. Suggestion: use the base verb 'heat' with the particle 'up' and add -s for third person singular subject 'it'.

× It's convenient and uses less oil than traditional methods, so I use it almost every week.

✓ It's convenient and uses less oil than traditional methods, so I use it almost every week.

Sentence is correct; subject-verb agreement is fine ('it uses'). No change needed. Included to indicate checked sentence.

× Yes, I think washing and sweeping machines are important specially for those people or person who live alone and the weekend is just their rest day.

✓ Yes, I think washing and sweeping machines are important, especially for people who live alone and whose weekend is their rest time.

Original mixed singular and plural ('those people or person who live') and used 'specially' incorrectly. Corrected to plural 'people who live' and added 'whose weekend is their rest time' to match plural. Also use 'especially' instead of 'specially'. Suggestion: keep number agreement between determiner and noun and use 'especially' for emphasis.

× So it is convenient to use the automatic washing machine and sweeping machine.

✓ So it is convenient to use an automatic washing machine and a sweeping machine.

Missing articles and slight unnatural phrasing. Use 'an' before singular, countable nouns. Also 'automatic washing machine and sweeping machine' should each have an article for clarity. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns.

× If it is my first time using a machine, I will definitely read the instruction on how to operate it so so I can check how to properly operate and maintain the the machine so I will not ruin or broken it.

✓ If it is my first time using a machine, I will definitely read the instructions on how to operate it so I can check how to properly operate and maintain the machine and I will not ruin or break it.

Multiple issues: 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' (countable), duplicated words 'so so' and 'the the', and incorrect verb 'broken' after 'will' should be base form 'break'. Also removed redundant clauses and corrected verb forms. Suggestion: use plural for instructions, avoid duplication, and after modal 'will' use base verb.

× Of course it is important because in the instructions they are telling you how to use it properly and to maintain it correctly so you will not damage the equipment and it it.

✓ Of course it is important because the instructions tell you how to use it properly and how to maintain it correctly so you will not damage the equipment or it.

Original had redundancy 'they are telling' (awkward progressive) and repeated 'it it'. Also article use 'the instructions' is more natural. Replaced with simple present 'tell' for general truth. Suggestion: use simple present for instructions and avoid repetition; ensure articles are appropriate.

× It also ensures the use of safety and efficiently.

✓ It also ensures safe and efficient use.

Original used noun/adverb order incorrectly: 'the use of safety and efficiently' is ungrammatical. Correct form is adjective + adjective + noun: 'safe and efficient use'. Suggestion: use adjectives to modify 'use' and place them before the noun.