Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be improved by adding more specific details and using linking words to make it more coherent. Try to avoid redundancy and keep your answer within five sentences.

예시: My favorite machine at home is definitely the air fryer because it is very easy to use and convenient. For example, it cooks food quickly without using much oil, which makes meals healthier. Additionally, it saves me a lot of time compared to traditional cooking methods.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some errors and redundancies. To improve, try to organize your thoughts clearly, use correct vocabulary, and provide specific reasons or examples. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, both washing machines and sweeping machines are important household appliances. However, in my country, sweeping machines are not commonly used, so most homes only have washing machines. Washing machines help save time and effort when cleaning clothes, which is very helpful.

제안: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrasing. To improve, try to speak more fluently and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions after buying a new machine. For instance, when we unpack a new appliance like an air conditioner, we look for the manual to understand how to use it properly. This helps prevent mistakes and ensures the machine works well.

제안: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. To improve, use correct grammar and vocabulary, and provide specific reasons with linking words to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, definitely. Reading instructions is very important because if you don't follow them, you might misuse the equipment. This can lead to damage or even cause danger to yourself or others.

× My favorite machine in my home is definitely Air Fryer, which is really easy to use and convenient.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is definitely the air fryer, which is really easy to use and convenient.

The noun 'Air Fryer' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific machine. Also, 'Air Fryer' should be in lowercase as it is a common noun here.

× Yes, washing machine, supermission, both are very important that in my country, in my home, there is no sipping machine, just just washing machine.

✓ Yes, washing machines and supervisions are both very important. In my country, in my home, there is no sweeping machine, just a washing machine.

The sentence has several singular/plural issues: 'washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'both'; 'supermission' is likely a mishearing or typo and corrected to 'supervision' but context unclear; 'sipping machine' should be 'sweeping machine'; 'just just' is repeated and corrected; 'washing machine' should be preceded by 'a' as singular countable noun.

× Yeah, surely we read the instruction and after we bought, we bought a new machine and then we we were unpacked, unpacked and and then we will find the instruction to use that sometime like air conditioning.

✓ Yeah, surely we read the instructions and after we buy a new machine, we unpack it and then we find the instructions to use it, sometimes like with air conditioning.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect prepositions. 'After we bought' should be 'after we buy' to match present tense context; 'we were unpacked' is passive and incorrect, should be 'we unpack it'; 'find the instruction to use that sometime like air conditioning' is unclear and corrected to 'find the instructions to use it, sometimes like with air conditioning' for clarity and correct preposition usage.

× There is no, no instruction to.

✓ There are no instructions.

The phrase 'There is no, no instruction to.' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'There are no instructions.' to correctly express the absence of instructions using plural form and correct verb agreement.

× Yeah, definitely. Reading instruction is really important because you know if you don't raise the instruction, you will misuse and then send some equipment can make you some danger.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Reading instructions is really important because if you don't read the instructions, you might misuse the equipment and it can be dangerous for you.

The sentence has pronoun and word choice errors: 'raise the instruction' should be 'read the instructions'; 'send some equipment can make you some danger' is incorrect and changed to 'it can be dangerous for you' for clarity and correct pronoun use.