Part 1
시험관
What is your favourite machine in your home?
수험생
Miles my favorite machine in my home is the washing machine because it helps me a lot. Many people in the past need to wash their clothes by hands, but on the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
시험관
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
수험생
Yes, I do. I regard washing machines and sweeping machines as vital parts of daily lives, modern daily lives, because both of them can help people to do homework which might need people to do them, do them by themselves in the past, so people can do other things.
시험관
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
수험생
Well, yes I do, and I definitely read the instructions before I use in the machine. First, it can avoid mishandling it because following the instruction is very important. If I not, might cause some potential dangers. Secondly, following the instruction can also use.
시험관
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
수험생
Yes its really important. I always read the instructions before using a machine to tell me to prevent accidents and avoid damaging that device by following the correct steps. For example, some machines have safety warnings that are very important to note in advance.
What is your favourite machine in your home?
점수: 65.0제안: 回答时语法和表达不够准确,且有些句子结构混乱。建议简化句子结构,注意时态和单复数的正确使用,同时避免重复表达。
예시: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. In the past, people had to wash clothes by hand, but now we just need to press a button, which is very convenient.
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
점수: 60.0제안: 回答中表达不够清晰,句子结构复杂且重复。建议使用更简洁明了的句子,并且用连接词使表达更连贯。
예시: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in modern life because they save time and effort. In the past, people had to do these chores manually, but now machines help us finish them quickly, so we can focus on other activities.
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
점수: 55.0제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题。建议注意句子完整性和语法正确,清晰表达原因和结果。
예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me avoid mistakes and potential dangers. Following the instructions also ensures that I use the machine correctly and safely.
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
점수: 70.0제안: 回答较为清晰,但表达略显重复。建议使用更自然的表达方式,并且注意句子流畅性。
예시: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important. It helps prevent accidents and protects the machine from damage by following the correct steps. For example, some machines have safety warnings that users should know before using them.
× Many people in the past need to wash their clothes by hands, but on the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
✓ Many people in the past needed to wash their clothes by hand, but in the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
这里“need”应使用过去式“needed”,因为句子描述的是过去的情况;“by hands”应改为“by hand”,因为“by hand”是固定搭配,表示用手;“on the country”应改为“in the country”,表示在某个国家或地区。
× Many people in the past need to wash their clothes by hands, but on the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
✓ Many people in the past needed to wash their clothes by hand, but in the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
描述过去的动作时,动词应使用过去式。
× Many people in the past need to wash their clothes by hands, but on the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
✓ Many people in the past needed to wash their clothes by hand, but in the country nowadays, we just need to push the buttons on the washing machine which can save our energy a lot.
介词“on the country”用法错误,正确应为“in the country”,表示在某个国家或地区。
× Yes, I do. I regard washing machines and sweeping machines as vital parts of daily lives, modern daily lives, because both of them can help people to do homework which might need people to do them, do them by themselves in the past, so people can do other things.
✓ Yes, I do. I regard washing machines and sweeping machines as vital parts of modern daily life, because both of them can help people do chores which people had to do by themselves in the past, so people can do other things.
“daily lives”应为不可数名词“daily life”;“homework”用法不当,应为“chores”(家务);“which might need people to do them”结构混乱,应简化为“which people had to do”;“do them by themselves”重复,改为“by themselves”。
× Yes, I do. I regard washing machines and sweeping machines as vital parts of daily lives, modern daily lives, because both of them can help people to do homework which might need people to do them, do them by themselves in the past, so people can do other things.
✓ Yes, I do. I regard washing machines and sweeping machines as vital parts of modern daily life, because both of them can help people do chores which people had to do by themselves in the past, so people can do other things.
“help people to do homework”中“to”可省略,且“homework”用法不当,应为“chores”。
× Well, yes I do, and I definitely read the instructions before I use in the machine. First, it can avoid mishandling it because following the instruction is very important. If I not, might cause some potential dangers. Secondly, following the instruction can also use.
✓ Well, yes I do, and I definitely read the instructions before I use the machine. First, it can help avoid mishandling it because following the instructions is very important. If I don't, it might cause some potential dangers. Secondly, following the instructions can also help.
“use in the machine”中“in”多余,应去掉;“following the instruction”应为复数“instructions”;“If I not”缺少助动词,应为“If I don't”;“following the instruction can also use”结构不完整,应补充谓语。
× Well, yes I do, and I definitely read the instructions before I use in the machine. First, it can avoid mishandling it because following the instruction is very important. If I not, might cause some potential dangers. Secondly, following the instruction can also use.
✓ Well, yes I do, and I definitely read the instructions before I use the machine. First, it can help avoid mishandling it because following the instructions is very important. If I don't, it might cause some potential dangers. Secondly, following the instructions can also help.
“the instruction”应为复数“the instructions”,因为通常说明书是多条指令的集合。
× Yes its really important. I always read the instructions before using a machine to tell me to prevent accidents and avoid damaging that device by following the correct steps.
✓ Yes, it's really important. I always read the instructions before using a machine because they tell me how to prevent accidents and avoid damaging the device by following the correct steps.
“its”应为“it's”(it is的缩写);“to tell me to prevent accidents”结构不正确,应改为“because they tell me how to prevent accidents”;“that device”改为“the device”更自然。