Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることを意識しましょう。例えば、時制の一致や冠詞の使い方に注意し、冗長な部分を省くと良いです。

예시: My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator. I recently bought a new one because my old refrigerator broke down two weeks ago. It is very convenient and helps keep my food fresh.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して明確に答え、具体的な理由や例を簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。また、関連する語彙を正しく使うことが重要です。

예시: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important because they help reduce the amount of housework. For example, my wife wants to buy a vacuum cleaner to make cleaning easier.

제안: 回答が矛盾しており、文法的にも不自然です。質問に対して一貫した答えを述べ、理由を明確に説明しましょう。接続詞を適切に使い、文を論理的に繋げることも大切です。

예시: No, I usually do not read the instructions before using a machine because it can be complicated and time-consuming. Instead, I prefer to start using the machine directly to save time.

제안: 回答が非常に不明瞭で、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して明確な意見を述べ、理由を簡潔に説明する練習をしましょう。文法や語彙の正確な使用も必要です。

예시: No, I don't think it is always important to read the instructions because many modern machines are designed to be easy to use. However, for complex devices, reading instructions can be helpful.

× My favorite item is a refrigerator because it is a very new type as I had a broken my old one and two weeks ago and I bought a new one immediately after breaking up.

✓ My favorite item is a refrigerator because it is a very new type as I broke my old one two weeks ago and bought a new one immediately after.

The phrase 'I had a broken my old one' is incorrect because 'had' is unnecessary and 'broken' should be the past tense verb 'broke'. Also, 'breaking up' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrase is 'broke my old one'. The sentence should use simple past tense to describe completed actions in the past.

× Yes, I think so, because the search machines can reduce the amount of housework towards this sort of Many young female likes to buy such items and my wife wants to buy it too.

✓ Yes, I think so, because such machines can reduce the amount of housework. Many young females like to buy such items and my wife wants to buy one too.

The phrase 'the search machines' is incorrect; it should be 'such machines'. 'Many young female likes' is wrong because 'female' should be plural 'females' and the verb should be 'like' to agree with the plural subject. Also, 'my wife wants to buy it too' should use 'one' to refer to an item, not 'it'.

× No, actually I don't. Usually I'll read instructions before using a machine and because it is complicated and time consuming.

✓ No, actually I don't. Usually I read instructions before using a machine because it is complicated and time-consuming.

The use of 'I'll' (I will) is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about a habitual action, so simple present 'I read' is appropriate. Also, 'and because' is redundant; 'because' alone suffices. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective.

× Instead I directly start to using the machine when I use a new machines because it is time efficient.

✓ Instead, I directly start using the machine when I use a new machine because it is time-efficient.

The phrase 'start to using' is incorrect; after 'start' we use either 'start to use' or 'start using'. Here, 'start using' is correct. Also, 'a new machines' is incorrect because 'machines' is plural but preceded by 'a'. It should be 'a new machine'. 'Time efficient' should be hyphenated as 'time-efficient' when used as an adjective.

× No, I don't think so because many machines are usually easy for everyone to use because in a modern society using either is very important for studying a well in the markets as many companies create such.

✓ No, I don't think so because many machines are usually easy for everyone to use. In modern society, using them is very important for studying well in the market as many companies create such machines.

The phrase 'using either' is unclear and incorrect; 'either' is not appropriate here. It should be 'using them' to refer to machines. 'Studying a well' is incorrect; it should be 'studying well'. 'In the markets' should be singular 'in the market' to refer to the general market. The sentence structure is also improved by splitting into two sentences for clarity.