Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on using correct grammar and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. For example, say "it's very functional" instead of "so much functional," and "helps my daily life" instead of "help my daily lives."

예시: My favourite machine at home is definitely my smartphone because it is very functional. For example, I use it not only to search for information but also to watch videos and keep in touch with my friends. It is extremely convenient and helps me in my daily life.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, complete your thoughts fully and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

예시: I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in our daily lives because they save a lot of time and effort. For instance, washing clothes by hand can be tiring and time-consuming, especially when you have many items to clean. Although some people believe hand washing is just as effective, machines usually provide better cleaning results and convenience.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains unclear phrases and grammatical errors. To improve, use clearer and more precise language, correct grammar, and provide coherent examples. For instance, clarify what you mean by "misuse of toes or automatic cutters" and "resetting stones."

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because there is a risk of accidents if I don't. For example, I could accidentally cut my fingers if I misuse sharp parts like blades, or cause damage to my home if I operate the machine incorrectly.

제안: Your answer is on the right track but contains unclear and awkward phrases such as "misuse the stones" and "breathing instructions." To improve, use precise vocabulary and clear examples related to safety and efficiency when using machines.

예시: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions carefully because it helps ensure safety. For example, using machines incorrectly can cause accidents like fires. Also, following the instructions helps people operate machines more efficiently and avoid damage.

× My favorite machine is definitely a smartphone because it's so much functional.

✓ My favorite machine is definitely a smartphone because it's so functional.

The phrase 'so much functional' is incorrect because 'functional' is an adjective and should be modified by 'so' rather than 'so much'. 'So much' is used with uncountable nouns or adverbs, not adjectives. Therefore, 'so functional' is the correct form.

× For instance, I can use it for not only searching information but also watching videos or even contact my friends.

✓ For instance, I can use it not only for searching information but also for watching videos or even contacting my friends.

The phrase 'use it for not only searching' is awkward and incorrect in preposition placement. The correct structure is 'use it not only for ... but also for ...'. Also, parallelism requires the verbs after 'not only' and 'but also' to be in the same form, so 'contact' should be 'contacting' to match 'searching' and 'watching'.

× It's so convenient and help my daily lives.

✓ It's so convenient and helps my daily life.

The verb 'help' does not agree with the singular subject 'It'. It should be 'helps'. Also, 'daily lives' is incorrect here because the speaker refers to their own life, so the singular 'daily life' is appropriate.

× I think washing machines and sweeping machines are quite importantly in our daily lives because they save a lot of time and effort.

✓ I think washing machines and sweeping machines are quite important in our daily lives because they save a lot of time and effort.

The word 'importantly' is an adverb, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe 'washing machines and sweeping machines'. Therefore, 'important' is the correct form.

× Although some people believe the results are similar, machines generally provide the motor and.

✓ Although some people believe the results are similar, machines generally provide better performance.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear ('provide the motor and' is unfinished). A complete and meaningful sentence is needed. 'Provide better performance' fits the context and completes the thought logically.

× Yes, I definitely read the instructions before using machine because there's a possibility to happen unexpected accidents.

✓ Yes, I definitely read the instructions before using a machine because there's a possibility of unexpected accidents happening.

The noun 'machine' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is singular and unspecified. Also, the phrase 'possibility to happen unexpected accidents' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'possibility of unexpected accidents happening'.

× For example, I may cut my own fingers because of a misuse of toes or automatic cutters, or maybe damage the house by resetting stones.

✓ For example, I may cut my own fingers because of misuse of tools or automatic cutters, or maybe damage the house by resetting stones.

The word 'toes' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'tools'. Also, 'a misuse of toes' is incorrect; 'misuse of tools' is the intended meaning. This correction clarifies the sentence.

× Yes, I think it's crucial to read the instructions carefully because it ensures people's safety.

✓ Yes, I think it's crucial to read the instructions carefully because they ensure people's safety.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'instructions', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'instructions'.

× For instance, if they misuse the stones, there's a possibility to cause a fire.

✓ For instance, if people misuse the stones, there's a possibility of causing a fire.

The pronoun 'they' is ambiguous here; specifying 'people' clarifies the subject. Also, 'possibility to cause' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'possibility of causing'.

× Additionally, breathing instructions can assist people using machines efficiently.

✓ Additionally, reading instructions can assist people in using machines efficiently.

The word 'breathing' is incorrect; it should be 'reading'. Also, 'assist people using machines efficiently' is ambiguous; adding 'in' clarifies that instructions help people to use machines efficiently.