Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、少し冗長で繰り返しが見られます。より効果的にするために、具体的な理由や感情を簡潔に述べ、文の長さを5文以内に抑えましょう。

예시: My favorite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it quickly removes dust and makes the room feel fresh. After vacuuming, the space looks noticeably cleaner, which improves my mood throughout the day.

제안: 回答は直接的ですが、内容がやや曖昧で繰り返しが多いです。具体的な理由や効果を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are essential because they save time and help maintain cleanliness. For example, clean clothes and tidy rooms create a comfortable environment that boosts daily productivity.

제안: 回答は明確で自然ですが、話し言葉の「ああ」や冗長な表現を減らし、より簡潔に述べると良いです。接続詞を使って文を滑らかに繋げましょう。

예시: I usually read the instructions the first time I use a machine. However, if I replace an old machine with a similar new one, I skip reading because I am already familiar with its operation.

제안: 回答は内容が重複しやすく、少し混乱を招く表現があります。明確な意見を述べ、理由を簡潔に説明し、接続詞で論理的に繋げることを意識しましょう。

예시: Yes, reading instructions is important, especially for first-time users, because it ensures safe and correct use. However, if you feel confident, trying the machine yourself can be a good way to learn.

× if my machine that I had before got taken down and I buy a new one, then I wouldn't read the instructions again because I already get used to using that machine.

✓ if my machine that I had before was taken down and I bought a new one, then I wouldn't read the instructions again because I already got used to using that machine.

The phrase 'got taken down' is informal and should be replaced with the correct past passive form 'was taken down'. Also, 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to maintain consistency with the past event. 'get used to' should be in past tense 'got used to' to match the time frame.

× if my machine that I had before got taken down and I buy a new one, then I wouldn't read the instructions again because I already get used to using that machine.

✓ if my machine that I had before was taken down and I bought a new one, then I wouldn't read the instructions again because I already got used to using that machine.

The verb 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to agree with the past context. Also, 'get used to' should be 'got used to' to reflect past experience.

× if you feel like you can do it, then I guess you could just take it a shot and give a chance of challenging yourself.

✓ if you feel like you can do it, then I guess you could just take a shot and give yourself a chance to challenge yourself.

The phrase 'take it a shot' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'take a shot'. Also, 'give a chance of challenging yourself' is awkward; it should be 'give yourself a chance to challenge yourself' to correctly use the modal verb and infinitive form.