Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "I think it's the best machine I ever have" and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about why you like the grinder.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the grinder because it helps me make fresh milkshakes every morning. For example, I blend bananas, milk, and a little sugar to create a smooth and delicious drink quickly and easily.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your opinion more directly and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words to clarify your reasoning and provide specific reasons or examples to support your view.

예시: I don't think washing and sweeping machines are very important because I believe cleaning by hand is more thorough. However, I admit these machines can save time, which might be helpful for busy people.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid awkward phrasing like "instructions that how to operate" and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to be more concise and clear.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before opening the box to understand how to operate the machine. If I miss any details, I refer back to the manual for assembly tips and safety information, such as the maximum speed settings.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, try to avoid repeating "I think" and provide a more structured response with specific reasons.

예시: Yes, reading the instructions is very important when assembling a machine. They explain how to use it properly, whether it's waterproof, the correct speed settings, and how to clean it safely.

× My favorite machine is a grinder and I think it's the best machine I ever have because when I wake up in the morning, I usually make my own milkshake.

✓ My favorite machine is a grinder and I think it's the best machine I have ever had because when I wake up in the morning, I usually make my own milkshake.

The phrase 'I ever have' is incorrect because it refers to a past experience. The correct past perfect form is 'I have ever had' to indicate an experience up to now.

× Like I put some banana and milk and put some sugars and then I start the machine and grind everything and make a really good shape.

✓ Like I put some banana and milk and put some sugar and then I start the machine and grind everything and make a really good shake.

The word 'sugars' is incorrect here because 'sugar' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'shape' is a wrong word in this context; the correct word is 'shake' referring to the milkshake.

× I think that there are, I think cleaning house with the by hand is a way more effective than with this machine.

✓ I think that cleaning the house by hand is way more effective than with this machine.

The phrase 'with the by hand' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'by hand'. Also, 'cleaning house' should be 'cleaning the house' to specify the object.

× Yeah, before even opening the box of the machine, I always read instructions that how to operate this machine.

✓ Yeah, before even opening the box of the machine, I always read the instructions on how to operate this machine.

The phrase 'read instructions that how to operate' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on' as in 'read the instructions on how to operate'.

× However, if I skip any part, I usually go to the manual that how to assemble this machine, how to operate this machine and what's the maximum speed I need to take care.

✓ However, if I skip any part, I usually refer to the manual on how to assemble this machine, how to operate this machine, and what maximum speed I need to take care of.

The phrase 'go to the manual that how to assemble' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'refer to the manual on how to assemble'. Also, 'what's the maximum speed I need to take care' should be 'what maximum speed I need to take care of'.

× Yeah. I think it's one of the important part of assembling the machine.

✓ Yeah. I think it's one of the important parts of assembling the machine.

The phrase 'one of the important part' is incorrect because 'one of the' requires a plural noun. It should be 'one of the important parts'.

× When you're assembling it, you have to read the instruction that how to use this machine, how to wash it, whether it's a waterproof or not and on what speed number you have to use it and how to clean it.

✓ When you're assembling it, you have to read the instructions on how to use this machine, how to wash it, whether it's waterproof or not, at what speed you have to use it, and how to clean it.

The phrase 'read the instruction that how to use' is incorrect; it should be 'read the instructions on how to use'. Also, 'whether it's a waterproof or not' should be 'whether it's waterproof or not'. The phrase 'on what speed number' is better expressed as 'at what speed'.