Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but lacks fluency and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more connected and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly, and keep your answer within 5 sentences. For example, you can say: 'My favourite machine at home is my laptop because I use it for many activities. For example, I watch YouTube videos, browse Facebook, and complete my assignments on it.'

예시: My favourite machine at home is my laptop because I use it for many activities. For example, I watch YouTube videos, browse Facebook, and complete my assignments on it.

제안: Your answer has some good ideas but the sentences are fragmented and unclear. Try to connect your ideas smoothly using linking words like 'because' and 'however'. Also, avoid short, incomplete sentences. For example, you can say: 'I think washing and sweeping machines are important because they save time. However, for people who cannot afford them, manual work is more common and acceptable.'

예시: I think washing and sweeping machines are important because they save time. However, for people who cannot afford them, manual work is more common and acceptable.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Use linking words like 'if' and 'however' properly. For example: 'If a machine is new to me, I always read the instructions because I need to understand how to use it. However, for machines I am familiar with, like my television or laptop, I do not read the instructions.'

예시: If a machine is new to me, I always read the instructions because I need to understand how to use it. However, for machines I am familiar with, like my television or laptop, I do not read the instructions.

제안: Your answer has many errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise. For example: 'I think it is important to read instructions when using a new machine. However, for machines I know well, like washing machines or laptops, I do not need to read instructions every time.'

예시: I think it is important to read instructions when using a new machine. However, for machines I know well, like washing machines or laptops, I do not need to read instructions every time.

× Well, to be honest, my favorite machine. Would be laptop.

✓ Well, to be honest, my favorite machine would be a laptop.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. Combining the two parts into one sentence and adding the article 'a' before 'laptop' corrects the structure and makes it complete.

× For instance, if I have to scroll my YouTube videos about to go through my Facebook pages and even if I have to.

✓ For instance, if I have to scroll through my YouTube videos, go through my Facebook pages, and even if I have to.

The phrase 'scroll my YouTube videos about to go through' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'scroll through' when referring to browsing videos. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.

× Do my assignment at river laptop.

✓ Do my assignment on my laptop.

The phrase 'at river laptop' is incorrect and unclear. The correct preposition is 'on' when referring to using a device like a laptop. Also, 'river' seems to be a mishearing or typo and should be removed.

× As far as I'm concerned. It is important. If you earn enough money to afford it because it obviously saves time.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, it is important if you earn enough money to afford it because it obviously saves time.

The original has sentence fragments and punctuation errors. Combining the sentences properly and ensuring subject-verb agreement improves clarity.

× However, for people like me who earns hardly. Enough.

✓ However, for people like me who earn hardly enough.

The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'earn' not 'earns'. Also, 'hardly enough' should be together without a period.

× I think a manual work is much more. Credible.

✓ I think manual work is much more credible.

'Manual work' is uncountable, so 'a' should be removed. Also, the period in the middle of the sentence is incorrect and should be removed.

× Also, be fair, if the person is alien to me, I'll definitely need to read an instruction because I cannot operate it without the instruction.

✓ Also, to be fair, if the machine is unfamiliar to me, I'll definitely need to read the instructions because I cannot operate it without them.

'Person is alien to me' is incorrect; it should refer to the machine being unfamiliar. 'An instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and pronouns should agree in number.

× However, if. I can relate to the machine and I've been using it previously. There's no need to. Create instruction.

✓ However, if I am familiar with the machine and have been using it previously, there's no need to read instructions.

Sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms are present. 'Create instruction' is incorrect; it should be 'read instructions' or 'refer to instructions'.

× For example, if I had to operate my televisions or my washing machine or my laptop, I don't use instruc.

✓ For example, if I have to operate my television, washing machine, or laptop, I don't use instructions.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly and ends abruptly. Correcting tense consistency and completing the word 'instructions' improves clarity.

× Well, I suppose if the motion is alien to me, I should definitely driven instruction before operating it.

✓ Well, I suppose if the machine is unfamiliar to me, I should definitely read instructions before operating it.

'Motion' is incorrect; it should be 'machine'. 'Driven instruction' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'read instructions'.

× However, there are several machines that I'm quite familiar with, for example, washing machine.

✓ However, there are several machines that I'm quite familiar with, for example, washing machines.

When referring to machines in general, the plural form 'washing machines' is appropriate.

× Electronic items, laptops, mobile services. This kind of machines those not even instructions before the operation.

✓ Electronic items, laptops, mobile devices—these kinds of machines do not even require instructions before operation.

'This kind of machines' is incorrect; it should be 'these kinds of machines' or 'this kind of machine'. Also, 'those not even instructions' is incorrect; it should be 'do not even require instructions'.