Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as "other house or Charles and." To improve, focus on using correct sentence structures and clearer vocabulary. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time and allows me to multitask. For instance, while the laundry is running, I can clean other parts of the house. This helps me manage my time efficiently.

제안: Your response addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "those ladies who are also in another jobs." To improve, use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, try to link your ideas more smoothly to enhance coherence.

예시: Yes, I believe washing and sweeping machines are essential because they allow us to multitask. For example, while the washing machine is running, we can sweep the house, which saves time. These machines are especially helpful for women who have other jobs or responsibilities.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like "helps true." To improve, ensure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific reasons.

예시: Definitely, I read the instructions before using any machine because it helps prevent unnecessary damage. Moreover, following the instructions ensures proper maintenance, which allows the machine to last longer.

제안: Your answer is well-structured and provides specific reasons and examples. However, some sentences are slightly long and could be simplified for clarity. Also, watch for minor grammatical errors like "the damages" instead of "damage."

예시: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because it prevents damage to both the machine and the user. For example, following the instructions can help avoid electric shocks and ensures the machine is maintained properly, so it lasts longer.

× I would say my favorite machine is washing machine because it helps to reduce the tremendous amount of time and helps in multitasking.

✓ I would say my favorite machine is the washing machine because it helps reduce a tremendous amount of time and helps with multitasking.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'washing machine' which is necessary when referring to a specific machine. Also, 'helps to reduce the tremendous amount of time' is awkward; it should be 'helps reduce a tremendous amount of time' for natural phrasing. Additionally, 'helps in multitasking' should be 'helps with multitasking' as 'help with' is the correct collocation.

× For example, while doing laundry I can do other house or Charles and.

✓ For example, while doing laundry, I can do other house chores.

The phrase 'other house or Charles and' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to be a mishearing or misspelling of 'other house chores.' Also, a comma is needed after 'laundry' to separate the introductory phrase. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It helps to manage the time efficiently and effectively.

✓ It helps manage time efficiently and effectively.

The phrase 'helps to manage' can be simplified to 'helps manage' for smoother and more natural English. Also, 'the time' is better as 'time' in this context because it refers to time in general, not a specific time.

× Yes, I think these machines are very important for doing multitasking.

✓ Yes, I think these machines are very important for multitasking.

The phrase 'for doing multitasking' is awkward; 'for multitasking' is the correct and natural expression.

× For example, while the washing machine is running, we can sweep the house.

✓ For example, while the washing machine is running, we can sweep the house.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× And it helps to save a lot of time and it is very useful for those ladies who are also in another jobs.

✓ It helps save a lot of time and is very useful for those ladies who also have other jobs.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal speech. 'Helps to save' can be simplified to 'helps save.' 'Those ladies who are also in another jobs' is incorrect; it should be 'those ladies who also have other jobs' to match plural 'jobs' and correct preposition usage.

× Definitely, I read the instructions before using a machine because it helps true.

✓ Definitely, I read the instructions before using a machine because it helps to avoid unnecessary damage to the machine.

The phrase 'helps true' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to be a mistake. The intended meaning is likely 'helps to avoid unnecessary damage.' This correction clarifies the sentence and fixes the grammar.

× Avoid the unnecessary damages to the machine and.

✓ It helps avoid unnecessary damage to the machine and

This fragment is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or completed properly. Also, 'damages' should be singular 'damage' when referring to harm in general.

× Useful for the good maintenance of the machine so that it can work for a longer time.

✓ It is useful for the proper maintenance of the machine so that it can work for a longer time.

This fragment lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'It is' makes it a complete sentence. 'Good maintenance' is better expressed as 'proper maintenance' for natural English.

× Oh yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because it not only helps in preventing the damages to the machine but also to the human beings who are running it.

✓ Oh yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because it not only helps prevent damage to the machine but also protects the people who are using it.

The phrase 'helps in preventing the damages' is awkward; 'helps prevent damage' is better. 'Damages' should be singular 'damage' when referring to harm in general. 'Human beings who are running it' is unnatural; 'people who are using it' is clearer and more natural.

× For example, it can prevent us from the electric shock if we read the instructions properly and also helps to maintain the machine for the working for a longer time.

✓ For example, it can prevent us from electric shock if we read the instructions properly and also helps maintain the machine so it works for a longer time.

The phrase 'prevent us from the electric shock' should be 'prevent us from electric shock' without 'the.' 'Helps to maintain the machine for the working for a longer time' is awkward; 'helps maintain the machine so it works for a longer time' is clearer and grammatically correct.