Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，语法和词汇使用错误较多，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并避免无关内容。

예시: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time and effort. After cooking and enjoying meals with my friends, I often feel too tired to wash the dishes by hand.

제안: 回答内容不连贯，词汇和语法错误较多，建议使用简单明了的句子，清楚表达观点并用连接词组织内容。

예시: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help people finish housework quickly. This gives people more free time to relax or spend with their family.

제안: 回答较完整，但句子较长且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，注意冠词和名词单复数，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me understand all its functions and use it properly. Also, it can prevent any potential harm or damage.

제안: 回答重复且表达不够清晰，建议避免重复，使用简洁句子表达观点，并用连接词连接句子，使内容连贯。

예시: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because they help you understand the device's features. Moreover, reading them can prevent damage caused by misuse.

× I would see the washing dishes machine because I really like to make emails by my own and sometimes making a very delicious males require quite time consuming and after enjoying the meals with your friends, it's let's hardly you you hardly have any energy to clean your dishes and.

✓ I would say the dishwasher because I really like to make meals by myself and sometimes making a very delicious meal requires quite a lot of time, and after enjoying the meals with your friends, you hardly have any energy to clean your dishes.

这里“making a very delicious males require quite time consuming”中，动词形式和搭配错误。应使用“making a very delicious meal requires quite a lot of time”，动名词作主语时谓语用单数，且“males”应为“meal”。另外，“I would see”应改为“I would say”，符合表达习惯。

× I would see the washing dishes machine because I really like to make emails by my own and sometimes making a very delicious males require quite time consuming and after enjoying the meals with your friends, it's let's hardly you you hardly have any energy to clean your dishes and.

✓ I would say the dishwasher because I really like to make meals by myself and sometimes making a very delicious meal requires quite a lot of time, and after enjoying the meals with your friends, you hardly have any energy to clean your dishes.

“washing dishes machine”应为“dishwasher”，更符合英语表达习惯。“emails”应为“meals”，且“males”是拼写错误，应为“meal”。

× I would see the washing dishes machine because I really like to make emails by my own and sometimes making a very delicious males require quite time consuming and after enjoying the meals with your friends, it's let's hardly you you hardly have any energy to clean your dishes and.

✓ I would say the dishwasher because I really like to make meals by myself and sometimes making a very delicious meal requires quite a lot of time, and after enjoying the meals with your friends, you hardly have any energy to clean your dishes.

“by my own”应为“by myself”，这是正确的反身代词用法。“it's let's hardly you you hardly have any energy”语句混乱，应简化为“you hardly have any energy”。

× Yes I do think so because they still mastic electronic devices can help people to do their house choice and make people have more time to have their freedom or do some family activities besides or when people saving a lot of time from their house food duties they can enjoy.

✓ Yes, I do think so because these domestic electronic devices can help people do their house chores and give them more time to enjoy their freedom or do some family activities. Besides, when people save a lot of time from their household duties, they can enjoy it more.

“still mastic electronic devices”应为“these domestic electronic devices”，“house choice”应为“house chores”，“saving”应为“save”，动词形式错误。句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。

× Yes I do think so because they still mastic electronic devices can help people to do their house choice and make people have more time to have their freedom or do some family activities besides or when people saving a lot of time from their house food duties they can enjoy.

✓ Yes, I do think so because these domestic electronic devices can help people do their house chores and give them more time to enjoy their freedom or do some family activities. Besides, when people save a lot of time from their household duties, they can enjoy it more.

“help people to do”中“to”可省略，英语中“help”后接动词原形更自然。“from their house food duties”应为“from their household duties”，介词使用不当。

× Yes, I like to read the instructions first because after reading the instructions, you can have the fully understanding about all the functions about this devices that can help you to fully utilize all the values about the devices. Besides, it can prevent some potential harm that may cause about your.

✓ Yes, I like to read the instructions first because after reading them, you can fully understand all the functions of these devices, which can help you to fully utilize their value. Besides, it can prevent some potential harm that may be caused to you.

“have the fully understanding”应为“fully understand”，“about this devices”应为“of these devices”，冠词和介词使用错误。“may cause about your”结构不完整，应改为“may be caused to you”。

× Yes, I like to read the instructions first because after reading the instructions, you can have the fully understanding about all the functions about this devices that can help you to fully utilize all the values about the devices. Besides, it can prevent some potential harm that may cause about your.

✓ Yes, I like to read the instructions first because after reading them, you can fully understand all the functions of these devices, which can help you to fully utilize their value. Besides, it can prevent some potential harm that may be caused to you.

“reading the instructions”后面重复使用“the instructions”显得冗余，改为“reading them”更简洁。“your”后缺少名词，导致句子不完整。

× Yes, yes, I do think so, because the instructions provide you the window for you to fully understand all the features about the devices and besides, after reading the instructions can help you prevent any potential damage that may cause from your mistakes or the misuse about these devices that will save a lot of.

✓ Yes, yes, I do think so, because the instructions provide you with a window to fully understand all the features of the devices. Besides, reading the instructions can help you prevent any potential damage that may be caused by your mistakes or misuse of these devices, which will save a lot of trouble.

“provide you the window”应为“provide you with a window”，介词使用错误。“features about the devices”应为“features of the devices”。“may cause from your mistakes”应为“may be caused by your mistakes”。句子末尾不完整，需补充。