Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하며, 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 명확히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: My favorite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it makes cleaning much easier and faster. Before vacuums, cleaning was tiring and time-consuming. This machine helps me keep my house tidy with less effort.

제안: 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하고, 문장을 명확하고 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 불필요한 단어를 줄이고 핵심 내용을 간결하게 전달하세요.

예시: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they have revolutionized our daily lives. They save us a lot of time on house chores, allowing us to focus on other activities.

제안: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 부자연스럽습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함하여 자연스럽고 논리적으로 답변하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: I usually read the instructions before using a machine to make sure I use it correctly and safely. This helps prevent mistakes and damage.

제안: 문장이 완성되지 않고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 완전한 문장으로 명확한 이유를 제시하며 답변하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because using a machine incorrectly can cause damage, and then I might not be able to fix it myself.

× My favorite machine is vacuum becauses really useful for cleaning.

✓ My favorite machine is the vacuum because it is really useful for cleaning.

'Vacuum' is a countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific machine. Also, 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because' and the sentence needs the subject 'it' before 'is'.

× Before in the past, I mean in the past.

✓ Before, in the past,

The phrase 'Before in the past, I mean in the past.' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'Before, in the past,' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Before we didn't have machine, I mean vacuum.

✓ Before, we didn't have a machine, I mean a vacuum.

'Machine' is a countable noun and requires an article 'a' when singular. Also, 'vacuum' here is singular and needs 'a' before it.

× It was really uncomfortable to clean.

✓ It was really uncomfortable to clean with.

The sentence lacks clarity; adding 'with' clarifies that cleaning was uncomfortable with the absence of the machine.

× It was really much.

✓ It was really hard.

'Much' is incorrectly used here. The intended meaning is likely 'hard' or 'difficult' to clean, so replacing 'much' with 'hard' is appropriate.

× Of course, they are really important is kind of revolution in our lives.

✓ Of course, they are really important; they are a kind of revolution in our lives.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper conjunction or punctuation. Splitting into two clauses with a semicolon and adding 'they are' improves clarity.

× They changed our lives because we don't need to taste spend a lot of time to do our house chores instead of the.

✓ They changed our lives because we don't need to spend a lot of time doing our house chores anymore.

'Taste' is incorrect here and should be removed. 'Instead of the' is incomplete and unclear. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper pronoun use.

× We can do many things for my flower lives.

✓ We can do many things for our lives.

'My flower lives' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended 'our lives'. Correcting pronoun and removing 'flower' which is irrelevant.

× I think actually I'm related to read instruction before using machine, but I think I need to read instruction before using the machine too.

✓ I think actually I'm used to reading instructions before using a machine, but I think I need to read the instructions before using the machine too.

'Related to read' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'used to reading'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and 'a machine' needs an article.

× Know how to. Use correctly, so I think it's important to read.

✓ I need to know how to use it correctly, so I think it's important to read.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks subject and object. Adding 'I need to know how to use it correctly' completes the sentence and clarifies meaning.

× Yes I do. As I mentioned before is really important to read the instruction because if I use the machine really wrong way then it's my own Fort so I can't fix myself, that's why I need to.

✓ Yes, I do. As I mentioned before, it is really important to read the instructions because if I use the machine in the wrong way, then it's my own fault so I can't fix it myself; that's why I need to.

Missing subject 'it' before 'is really important'. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Fort' is a misspelling of 'fault'. Added commas and semicolon for clarity and corrected pronouns.