Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答不够连贯，句子不完整，表达不清晰。建议回答时先给出主题句，然后用连词连接具体细节，避免断句和不完整表达。

예시: My favorite machine at home is my computer because I use it for both gaming and work. Moreover, it has a bright screen which makes it easy to use even in low light.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词使内容连贯。

예시: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in our daily life because they save us a lot of time and effort by doing housework efficiently.

제안: 回答表达混乱，句子不完整且含糊。建议先明确回答问题，然后用具体例子支持，并保持句子完整和逻辑清晰。

예시: Usually, I don't read the instructions before using a machine. However, if it is a second-hand machine, like a washing machine in a rented house, I make sure to read the instructions carefully to avoid mistakes.

제안: 回答简洁但可以更具体。建议说明为什么重要，并举例说明阅读说明书的好处。

예시: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because it helps me understand how to use the machine correctly and avoid damaging it.

× I play games and exp. The light on it.

✓ I play games and explore the light on it.

句子结构不完整，'exp.' 是不完整的单词，应为 'explore'，使句子完整且有意义。

× Besides, it is very effective to work on it.

✓ Besides, it is very efficient to work on it.

'effective' 用于描述效果，'efficient' 更适合描述工作效率，表达更准确。

× Yes, washing machines, Sweeping machines are worrying. Important in our daily life.

✓ Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are important in our daily life.

句子结构混乱，'worrying' 用词错误，应为 'important'，并且需要连接词 'and' 连接两个名词。

× It saves us from. Housework.

✓ They save us from housework.

句子断裂，缺少主语和谓语，且 'washing machines and sweeping machines' 是复数，谓语动词应为复数形式 'save'。

× Well, I wrongly read the instructions before using a machine when it hit.

✓ Well, I wrongly read the instructions before using a machine when it broke down.

'hit' 用词不当，应为 'broke down' 表示机器坏了，更符合语境。

× It is a brand new one when it comes to a second hand machine, like a washing machine in a rented house.

✓ It is a brand new one, unlike a second-hand machine, like a washing machine in a rented house.

句子结构不清晰，需用 'unlike' 表示对比，使句意明确。

× I don't usually read the instructions.

✓ I usually don't read the instructions.

副词位置调整，'usually' 放在助动词 'do' 后更自然。

× It is important to read the instructions when I can't operate the machine properly.

✓ It is important to read the instructions if I can't operate the machine properly.

条件句中用 'if' 更合适，表示假设条件。