Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question with clear sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will improve clarity.

예시: My favourite machine at home is the television in our attic because it provides great entertainment during my leisure time. Moreover, I often enjoy watching our favourite shows with my parents, which helps us spend quality time together.

제안: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, which reduce clarity. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, be careful with word choice and sentence structure to make your point more understandable.

예시: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important, especially for people with busy lives. They save time by handling household chores efficiently, which allows individuals to focus on other personal activities.

제안: Your answer is fragmented and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and clarity. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid unnecessary phrases and focus on directly answering the question with clear reasons.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because I am not an expert. The instructions help me understand how to operate the machine correctly and safely.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains incomplete sentences. To improve, provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid filler phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct.

예시: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because they guide people on how to use machines safely and correctly. This helps prevent mistakes that could cause damage or accidents.

× Well, when it comes to your house, your appliances, I would lean towards the television in my home attic and as I think it is a great device is there that can offer me great entertainment during my leisure time.

✓ Well, when it comes to my house and my appliances, I would lean towards the television in my home attic as I think it is a great device that can offer me great entertainment during my leisure time.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'your' instead of 'my' when referring to the speaker's own house and appliances. Pronouns should correctly reflect the subject's perspective to avoid confusion.

× Additionally, I usually spend quality of time with my parents sitting in front of the TV and watching my our favorite.

✓ Additionally, I usually spend quality time with my parents sitting in front of the TV and watching our favourite shows.

The phrase 'my our favorite' is incorrect due to conflicting possessive pronouns. It should be 'our favourite' to correctly indicate shared preference. Also, 'quality of time' should be 'quality time' as it is a fixed expression.

× Well, personally I think washing machine since we payment machines are of critical significance particularly for the people with busy schedules as it allows people to spend less time with these chores at home allowing their lives to be more convenient and they can focusing on other personal things.

✓ Well, personally I think washing machines and sweeping machines are of critical significance, particularly for people with busy schedules, as they allow people to spend less time on these chores at home, making their lives more convenient and enabling them to focus on other personal things.

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms ('washing machine' and 'payment machines'). Also, 'they can focusing' is incorrect; it should be 'enabling them to focus'. Proper subject-verb agreement and consistent plural forms are necessary for clarity.

× I definitely read instructions before using any machine as. I am not an expert or professional a machinery, which means that I don't have professional knowledge.

✓ I definitely read instructions before using any machine as I am not an expert or professional in machinery, which means that I don't have professional knowledge.

The sentence has an unnecessary period after 'as' and misuses 'a machinery' which should be 'in machinery'. Also, the pronoun usage is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So this instructions are pretty helpful and effective for me to know how to use it correctly.

✓ So these instructions are pretty helpful and effective for me to know how to use it correctly.

'This instructions' is incorrect because 'instructions' is plural and requires the plural demonstrative pronoun 'these'.

× And also a voice. You know it.

✓ And also, you know, a voice guides me.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It lacks proper structure and connection between ideas. The correction provides a complete sentence that conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× Well, I actually think it is of critical significance for everyone to read the instructions as it teaches or guides people how to operate machine safely and correctly in order prevent some unnecessary mistakes that may negatively impact or bring some, you know, negative circumstances or consequences for.

✓ Well, I actually think it is of critical significance for everyone to read the instructions as they teach or guide people on how to operate machines safely and correctly in order to prevent unnecessary mistakes that may negatively impact or bring negative consequences.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it' to refer to 'instructions' which is plural, so 'they' is correct. Also, 'operate machine' should be 'operate machines'. The phrase 'in order prevent' is missing 'to'. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.