Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "very short hair" and "got crazy very quickly"; instead, say "My hair gets messy quickly." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, and correct grammar errors such as "I need to wash it everyday" should be "I need to wash it every day."

예시: My favorite machine at home is my hair dryer because my hair gets messy quickly. I wash it every morning, and the hair dryer helps it dry fast, saving me time and effort.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammar mistakes and unclear phrasing. For example, "I washing machines and sweeping machines are definitely save me" is incorrect. Also, avoid vague pronouns like "he" when referring to machines. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect ideas clearly. Try to be more concise and precise.

예시: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save me a lot of time and energy. Since I don't enjoy housework, these machines make my daily routine easier and more efficient.

제안: Your answer tells a good story but has some grammar and phrasing issues. For example, "I didn't read the instruction before using machine" should be "I didn't read the instructions before using machines." Also, avoid repetition like "very carefully and very thoroughly." Use linking words like "however" or "but" to improve flow.

예시: I didn't usually read instructions before using machines. However, once I broke my new coffee machine because of that mistake. Since then, I always read the instructions carefully to avoid problems.

제안: Your answer has good points but needs clearer structure and grammar corrections. For example, "I realize how important, you know how the machine operate" is unclear. Also, "a friend who is engineer" should be "a friend who is an engineer." Use linking words like "especially" and "also" properly and avoid filler phrases like "you know."

예시: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important. Especially after the coffee machine incident, I realized how crucial it is to understand how a machine operates. Also, a friend who is an engineer told me that following instructions helps avoid risks and ensures safety.

× My favorite machine at my home is my hair dryer.

✓ My favorite machine at my home is my hair dryer.

No correction needed for this sentence as 'machine' and 'hair dryer' are correctly used in singular form.

× You can see that I have a very short hair and it got crazy very quickly so I need to wash it everyday in the morning and hair dryer can help my hair dry very quickly and it saves a lot of time and energy.

✓ You can see that I have very short hair and it gets crazy very quickly, so I need to wash it every day in the morning, and the hair dryer can help my hair dry very quickly and it saves a lot of time and energy.

The word 'hair' is uncountable and should not have 'a' before it. 'Got' should be 'gets' to agree with present tense. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'Hair dryer' needs the definite article 'the' before it. These corrections improve singular/plural usage and verb tense agreement.

× Yes, I think so because I washing machines and sweeping machines are definitely save me a lot of time and energy and since I don't enjoying doing the housework, I really appreciate how they are there to help me out and I think he may my daily routine more easier and more efficient.

✓ Yes, I think so because washing machines and sweeping machines definitely save me a lot of time and energy, and since I don't enjoy doing the housework, I really appreciate how they are there to help me out, and I think they make my daily routine easier and more efficient.

Removed the incorrect 'I' before 'washing machines'. 'Are definitely save' should be 'definitely save' to correct verb agreement. 'Don't enjoying' should be 'don't enjoy' to use the base verb after 'don't'. 'He may my daily routine more easier' is incorrect; corrected to 'they make my daily routine easier' for subject-verb agreement and correct comparative form.

× I didn't read the instruction before using machine in the past.

✓ I didn't read the instructions before using the machine in the past.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it usually refers to multiple steps. 'Using machine' needs the definite article 'the' before 'machine'. These corrections fix singular/plural and article usage.

× But there is a one time I didn't read the instruction and I ended up breaking my new coffee machine and ever since then I start to read the instructions very carefully and very thoroughly.

✓ But there was one time I didn't read the instructions and I ended up breaking my new coffee machine, and ever since then I have started to read the instructions very carefully and very thoroughly.

'There is a one time' should be 'there was one time' to match past tense. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'I start to read' should be 'I have started to read' to indicate an action continuing from past to present.

× Yeah, I think so, Especially after the coffee machine incident last time, I did some reflection and I realize how important, you know how the machine operate in their specific way.

✓ Yeah, I think so, especially after the coffee machine incident last time, I did some reflection and I realized how important it is to know how the machine operates in its specific way.

'I realize' should be past tense 'I realized' to match 'did some reflection'. 'How the machine operate' should be 'how the machine operates' for third person singular agreement. Added 'it is to know' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Also, I have a friend who is engineer told me that using instruction can really help avoid the risk and ensure the safe.

✓ Also, I have a friend who is an engineer who told me that using instructions can really help avoid risks and ensure safety.

Added 'an' before 'engineer' for correct article usage. 'Using instruction' should be 'using instructions' (plural). 'Avoid the risk' should be 'avoid risks' (general). 'Ensure the safe' should be 'ensure safety' (noun form). These corrections fix article, plural, and noun usage errors.