Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and use clear linking phrases. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and pronouns, and avoid filler words. Give one or two specific examples of situations that test your patience and explain briefly how you react or manage it.

예시: To be honest, I'm not a very patient person. For example, when plans change unexpectedly, I tend to get frustrated and lose focus. However, I'm trying to manage this by taking deep breaths and reminding myself that I can adapt, which helps me calm down quickly.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add a concise, specific example using linking words (for example, because, so). Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I feel the time goes so slowly" or "the class feels long"). Mention briefly what you do when you feel impatient.

예시: I become impatient when I have to do activities that don't interest me. For example, during some university lectures I find the content boring, so the class seems to drag on and I struggle to concentrate. Because of that, I usually take short notes or ask a question to stay engaged.

제안: Structure your answer with a topic sentence, then explain cause and effect using linking words (because, so, however). Use more formal contractions and correct infinitive forms (e.g., "want to" not "wanna"). Offer a brief strategy you use or want to try to handle long tasks.

예시: When I have to work on something for a long time, I feel stressed and often want to take a break because my focus drops. However, if I take a long break, I keep thinking about the task and feel more anxious. To avoid this cycle, I now use the Pomodoro technique: I work for 25 minutes and then take a 5-minute break to stay productive and reduce stress.

제안: Answer directly and concisely, then provide a specific reason using linking words (because, so). Use correct verb forms and avoid informal contractions like "gonna." Mention one concrete example of how patience helps you as a student.

예시: Yes, being a student requires patience because you must complete many courses that may not interest you but are useful in the long term. For example, I had to study a difficult statistics module last year; by persevering and asking tutors for help, I improved my grade and learned useful skills.

제안: Start with a clear comparative sentence, then explain why with a specific example. Use correct tense and grammar (e.g., "I am more patient now because I think more logically") and avoid unclear words like "fevers." Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I can consider consequences before reacting. For instance, as a child I would give up on difficult homework, but now I plan my time and ask for help, which helps me stay calm and complete tasks.

× I am not really patient person to be honest.

✓ I am not a very patient person, to be honest.

Missing article 'a' before 'patient person' and unnatural adverb placement. Add 'a' and use 'very' for natural emphasis; place 'to be honest' at end or set off with commas.

× I have it to early get ****** *** easily when something's not going through as I planned.

✓ I tend to get upset easily when something doesn't go according to my plan.

Incorrect phrase 'I have it to early' and incorrect tense/structure 'when something's not going through as I planned.' Use 'tend to' for habit and 'doesn't go according to my plan' for present habitual situation; 'planned' changed to 'my plan' for noun form.

× I found out that it is really difficult for me to control my emotions sometimes and then I'm actually really easy to lose myself.

✓ I find it really difficult to control my emotions sometimes, and I can easily lose myself.

Use present simple 'find' for a current general truth rather than past 'found out.' 'I'm actually really easy to lose myself' is ungrammatical — use 'I can easily lose myself.'

× For example, when I'm taking my class at uni, I feel the time's going so long because it's not something that I really want to do.

✓ For example, when I'm in class at university, time seems to drag because it's not something I really want to do.

Use idiomatic 'in class' or 'attending class' and 'time seems to drag' instead of 'time's going so long.' 'Uni' expanded to 'university' for formality; remove extra 'that'.

× And then I feel like I want to escape from here and I can't really listen to the lecture.

✓ I feel like I want to get out of there, and I can't really pay attention to the lecture.

'Escape from here' is awkward in this context; 'get out of there' or 'leave' is more natural. Use 'pay attention' rather than 'listen' to indicate focusing on the lecture.

× I will feel so stressed and I really wanna take a break, but if I take a break, that still makes me to think about something that I really have to do, which means I'm basically not taking any break but just stressing myself.

✓ I feel very stressed and really want to take a break, but if I do, I still think about things I have to do, so I'm basically not relaxing but only stressing myself.

Avoid unnecessary future 'I will feel' for habitual reaction; use present simple. Informal 'wanna' should be 'want to.' Remove 'makes me to think' — use 'I still think.' Use parallel structure and clearer phrasing.

× So I'm just repeating this every time.

✓ So this keeps repeating every time.

Original is understandable but awkward. 'This keeps repeating' is a clearer, more natural expression of a recurring pattern.

× As a student, I think so, because at school you don't really get to choose what to do, but you really have to take every single classes because it's gonna help for you in the future.

✓ As a student, I think so, because at school you don't always get to choose what to do, and you have to take every class because it will help you in the future.

'Every single classes' mixes singular/plural—use 'every class' or 'all classes.' 'Gonna' is informal; use 'will.' 'Help for you' incorrect preposition — use 'help you.' Adjust 'don't really' to 'don't always' for clarity.

× Yes I am. So for now I grew up and I can think every action more logically.

✓ Yes I am. Now that I've grown up, I can think about my actions more logically.

Tense and structure incorrect: 'for now I grew up' mixes present and past. Use present perfect 'I've grown up' to indicate change up to now. 'Think every action' should be 'think about my actions.'

× When I was kids I just think about my emotion or about my fevers like I don't really care about anything else.

✓ When I was a child, I only thought about my emotions or my feelings and didn't really care about anything else.

Use singular 'a child' not 'kids.' Match tense 'thought' for past. 'Emotion' and 'fevers' are incorrect word choices; use 'emotions' and 'feelings.' Also adjust negatives to past 'didn't.'

× But now I can think wisely.

✓ But now I can think more wisely.

Add 'more' to show a comparative improvement over the past. 'Think wisely' is grammatical but 'more wisely' clarifies change.