Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时时态使用不准确，且表达不够自然。建议使用现在时态描述习惯，并简化句子结构，使表达更流畅。

예시: I am usually a patient person, but I become impatient when a deadline is approaching.

제안: 表达中有语法错误和重复，建议简化句子，使用更准确的词汇表达情绪和生理反应。

예시: I feel impatient when I am under pressure because it makes me anxious and my heart beats faster.

제안: 句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议分句表达观点，使用连接词使逻辑更清楚。

예시: I feel relaxed when I have a long time to complete a task because it gives me confidence and patience to do it well.

제안: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多。建议先明确身份，再说明作业如何锻炼耐心，避免重复和错误。

예시: I am a student, so I don't have a job. However, doing homework requires patience because rushing can lead to mistakes.

제안: 时态混用且句子不完整，表达不清。建议使用正确时态，分句表达对比，并补充完整句子。

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child because my parents used to do things quickly, so I didn't have time to be patient. Now, I spend more time on tasks and have learned to be patient.

× Sometimes I was a patient person because it's not a related deadline, but sometimes I wasn't a patient person because it's close to the deadline.

✓ Sometimes I am a patient person because it's not a related deadline, but sometimes I am not a patient person because it's close to the deadline.

这里描述的是一般情况，应该使用一般现在时，而不是过去时。将"was"和"wasn't"改为"am"和"am not"。

× Sometimes I was a patient person because it's not a related deadline, but sometimes I wasn't a patient person because it's close to the deadline.

✓ Sometimes I am a patient person because it's not a relevant deadline, but sometimes I am not a patient person because it's close to the deadline.

"related deadline"用词不当，应该用"relevant deadline"表示“相关的截止日期”。

× I think it's the pressures that make me feel impatient because the pressures always make me mad of it and I feel so uncomfortable.

✓ I think it's the pressures that make me feel impatient because the pressures always make me mad about it and I feel so uncomfortable.

短语"mad of it"不正确，正确用法是"mad about it"，表示对某事生气。

× My heart beats so fast that I cannot relax myself to be patient.

✓ My heart beats so fast that I cannot relax to be patient.

"relax"后不需要反身代词"myself"，直接用"relax"即可。

× Well, I think it's normal for me and I feel a little bit relaxed because I still have a lot of time to finish it and I have the confidence to make it finish the while because long time give me more power and more patience.

✓ Well, I think it's normal for me and I feel a little bit relaxed because I still have a lot of time to finish it and I have the confidence to finish it because a long time gives me more power and more patience.

"make it finish the while"表达不正确，改为"finish it"。"long time"前应加冠词"a"，且"give"应改为第三人称单数"gives"。

× Sorry I don't have a job, I'm a student, but the homework makes me to be patient sometimes.

✓ Sorry I don't have a job, I'm a student, but the homework makes me be patient sometimes.

动词"make"后接动词原形，不加"to"，所以应改为"makes me be patient"。

× Because if you are impatient to do the homework and in a hurry the correct answers you may forget or forgive.

✓ Because if you are impatient doing the homework and in a hurry, you may forget or overlook the correct answers.

"impatient to do"应改为"impatient doing"。"forget or forgive"用词不当，应该是"forget or overlook"，表示忘记或忽略。

× I think I'm more patient now because when I was a child, my parents are doing everything in a quick I don't have time to be patient, I don't have time to calm down myself.

✓ I think I'm more patient now because when I was a child, my parents did everything quickly. I didn't have time to be patient, I didn't have time to calm myself down.

"parents are doing"时态错误，应为过去时"did"。"in a quick"用词错误，应为副词"quickly"。"calm down myself"顺序错误，应为"calm myself down"。

× But now there is something that I should spend a long time to do. So the patient.

✓ But now there are some things that I should spend a long time doing. So I am patient.

"there is something"改为复数"there are some things"更符合语境。"spend a long time to do"应改为"spend a long time doing"。"So the patient"不完整，应改为"So I am patient"。