Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: คำตอบของคุณมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ที่ไม่เหมาะสม เช่น 'Persian person' ควรเป็น 'patient person' และ 'impaired' ควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องเช่น 'impatient' นอกจากนี้ คำตอบควรมีความชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น โดยใช้ประโยคที่สั้นและเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างเหมาะสม

예시: I would say I am a patient person, but it depends on the situation. For example, I find it hard to stay calm when I study for a long time or learn new skills like languages. However, sometimes I do get a bit impatient when things move slowly.

제안: คำตอบมีการใช้คำผิด เช่น 'impaired' ควรเป็น 'impatient' และ 'impact' ควรเป็น 'impatient' หรือคำที่เหมาะสมกว่า นอกจากนี้ คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

예시: I usually feel impatient when things move very slowly or when people don't keep their promises. For example, waiting for someone who is always late makes me frustrated. Also, I get impatient when I try to learn something new but my progress seems very slow.

제안: คำตอบมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ เช่น 'stay a crime' ควรเป็น 'stay calm' และ 're washing myself' ไม่ชัดเจน ควรใช้คำที่เหมาะสมและประโยคที่ชัดเจน นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความต่อเนื่องของความคิด

예시: It depends, but generally I try to stay calm. For example, if I read a book for a long time or work on a big project, I might get bored at first. However, I usually find ways to make it interesting, like setting small goals or taking short breaks after finishing parts.

제안: คำตอบมีการใช้คำผิด เช่น 'patronage' ควรเป็น 'patience' และ 'leap out myself' ไม่เหมาะสม ควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่ชัดเจน นอกจากนี้ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

예시: Yes, I think patience is very important in my job. For example, when I have to explain something to someone who doesn't understand quickly, I need to stay calm and be patient. Sometimes it takes longer than expected, so being patient helps me manage stress and complete my work effectively.

제안: คำตอบไม่ชัดเจนและมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์มาก ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและตรงประเด็นมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างมีเหตุผล

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was younger, I used to get upset easily if things didn't go my way or if I had to wait. For example, I remember feeling frustrated during long conversations. However, I have learned to be more patient over time.

× I would say I'm Persian person.

✓ I would say I'm a patient person.

The student used 'Persian' instead of 'patient', which is a wrong adjective choice. The question asks about patience, so the correct adjective is 'patient'. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'patient person'.

× Also is depend on the situation.

✓ Also, it depends on the situation.

The sentence lacks the subject 'it' and the verb form 'depends' for third person singular. 'Is depend' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it depends'.

× For instance I can't wait calmly when I study in a long time or when I'm learning something new like languages or new skill.

✓ For instance, I can't wait calmly when I study for a long time or when I'm learning something new like languages or a new skill.

The phrase 'study in a long time' is incorrect; it should be 'study for a long time'. Also, 'new skill' needs an article 'a' before it.

× However I sometime I get a bit impaired everything movie slow.

✓ However, sometimes I get a bit impatient when everything moves slowly.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Impaired' is incorrect; the correct word is 'impatient'. 'Movie slow' should be 'moves slowly' to use the correct verb and adverb form.

× I usually feel impaired when the thing are moving very slow or people don't keep their promise.

✓ I usually feel impatient when things are moving very slowly or people don't keep their promises.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match 'are'. 'Slow' should be the adverb 'slowly' to modify 'moving'. 'Promise' should be plural 'promises' to match 'people'.

× For example, if I waiting for someone who always late, it can be quite friendly and I also get impact when I'm trying to learn something new but progress seem very slow in.

✓ For example, if I am waiting for someone who is always late, it can be quite frustrating and I also get impatient when I'm trying to learn something new but progress seems very slow.

'If I waiting' should be 'if I am waiting' for correct present continuous tense. 'Who always late' should be 'who is always late'. 'Friendly' is incorrect adjective here; 'frustrating' fits better. 'Get impact' should be 'get impatient'. 'Progress seem' should be 'progress seems' for subject-verb agreement. The sentence ends abruptly; 'in' is unnecessary.

× Is depend but generally I try to stay a crime.

✓ It depends but generally I try to stay calm.

'Is depend' should be 'It depends' with subject and verb agreement. 'Stay a crime' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stay calm'.

× For example if I reading a book for a long or working on a big project I might get a bit bored at first but I usually find a small way to make it interesting like setting my my goal or re washing myself when I finish apart.

✓ For example, if I am reading a book for a long time or working on a big project, I might get a bit bored at first but I usually find a small way to make it interesting like setting my goal or rewarding myself when I finish a part.

'If I reading' should be 'if I am reading' for present continuous tense. 'For a long' should be 'for a long time'. 'My my goal' is a repetition error; only one 'my' is needed. 'Re washing myself' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'rewarding myself'. 'Finish apart' should be 'finish a part'.

× Yes, I think patronage is quite important in my job.

✓ Yes, I think patience is quite important in my job.

'Patronage' is incorrect word choice; the correct word is 'patience'.

× For example, when I have to do expand something to someone who doesn't understand quickly, I need to stay calm and leap out myself.

✓ For example, when I have to explain something to someone who doesn't understand quickly, I need to stay calm and keep myself composed.

'Do expand something' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'explain something'. 'Leap out myself' is incorrect and unclear; a better phrase is 'keep myself composed' or 'control myself'.

× Clearly sometimes takes longer than expect, so being part helped me manage straight and compete work effectively.

✓ Clearly, sometimes it takes longer than expected, so being patient helps me manage stress and complete work effectively.

The sentence lacks subject 'it' before 'takes'. 'Expect' should be past participle 'expected'. 'Being part' should be 'being patient'. 'Manage straight' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'manage stress'. 'Compete work' should be 'complete work'.

× When I was so shy, I really appreciate because I used to get upset very easily if the thing didn't go on my way or have to wait or something long that I want.

✓ When I was very shy, I really used to get upset very easily if things didn't go my way or if I had to wait for something long that I wanted.

'I really appreciate' is incorrect in past context; 'I really used to get upset' fits better. 'The thing' should be plural 'things'. 'Didn't go on my way' should be 'didn't go my way'. 'Have to wait or something long that I want' should be 'had to wait for something long that I wanted'.

× For example, I remember failing failing when there was a long pressure between two were doing a conversation.

✓ For example, I remember feeling frustrated when there was a long pause while two people were having a conversation.

'Failing failing' is a repetition and incorrect word; likely intended 'feeling frustrated'. 'Long pressure' is incorrect; 'long pause' fits better. 'Between two were doing a conversation' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'while two people were having a conversation'.

× However, I have to go up I.

✓ However, I have to grow up.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'Go up I' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'grow up'.