Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as 'I can patience' instead of 'I can be patient'. Try to use simpler, correct phrases and avoid repetition. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence.

예시: I am patient in some situations, especially with people I know. However, I get impatient when I have to wait in long queues at the supermarket or bank because I feel it wastes my time.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions and incomplete thoughts. Focus on giving a direct answer with clear supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to wait in busy markets or queues because I want to finish my tasks quickly. Waiting feels like a waste of time, especially when I have important work to do.

제안: Your answer shows your feelings but is difficult to understand due to grammatical errors and repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to explain your feelings and reasons.

예시: I feel anxious when I have to work on something for a long time because I worry about finishing it on time. Moreover, tight deadlines increase my pressure.

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Use correct sentence structures and avoid repeating phrases. Also, explain your points with linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I am self-employed and work independently, so I often need to make quick decisions. Therefore, my routine tasks do not require much patience, which helps me relieve stress and maintain calmness.

제안: Your answer has good content but is affected by grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Use clear sentence structures and linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have children and more responsibilities. Dealing with them requires a lot of patience; otherwise, it could cause serious problems. My experiences have taught me to be more patient.

× It depends on on some situation I I can patience with people, but I cannot patience with the guardians because for example when I'm waiting for the flight or when I'm when I'm queuing the supermarket or in the bank.

✓ It depends on some situations. I can be patient with people, but I cannot be patient with the guardians because, for example, when I'm waiting for a flight or when I'm queuing at the supermarket or in the bank.

The word 'patience' is a noun, but the sentence requires the adjective 'patient' to describe the speaker's ability. Also, 'on on' is a repetition error, and 'queuing the supermarket' should be 'queuing at the supermarket' to use the correct preposition.

× when I'm when I'm queuing the supermarket or in the bank.

✓ when I'm queuing at the supermarket or in the bank.

The verb 'queue' is usually followed by the preposition 'at' when referring to a place. Using 'the supermarket' without 'at' is incorrect.

× When I am waiting for a for a time in a market QQ in a market or Quinnipiac.

✓ When I am waiting for some time in a market or in a queue.

The phrase 'waiting for a for a time' is redundant and unclear. Also, 'QQ' seems to be a mispronunciation or typo for 'queue'. The correct preposition is 'in' for 'in a market' and 'in a queue'.

× So I think it's wasting of time when I was when I am in Harbury, I have my my intention is to finish that work so that I will be.

✓ So I think it's a waste of time. When I am in Harbury, my intention is to finish that work so that I can be done.

The phrase 'it's wasting of time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'it's a waste of time'. Also, 'I have my my intention is' is redundant; it should be 'my intention is'. The sentence ending is incomplete and needs clarification.

× I feel anxious because I am worried about the the doing thing on the and on the finish that the things on on time and if I feel pressured if there if there is a tight deadline moreover.

✓ I feel anxious because I am worried about doing things and finishing them on time. I also feel pressured if there is a tight deadline.

The phrase 'the doing thing on the and on the finish that the things on on time' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The correct form is 'worried about doing things and finishing them on time'. Also, 'moreover' is misplaced and unnecessary here.

× I'm a self-employed so I work independently so I focus on the quick decision rather than rather than others so my routine task don't need patience.

✓ I'm self-employed, so I work independently. I focus on quick decisions rather than others, so my routine tasks don't need patience.

'I'm a self-employed' is incorrect; 'self-employed' is an adjective and does not need an article. 'The quick decision' should be 'quick decisions' to generalize. 'My routine task' should be plural 'tasks' to agree with 'don't'.

× So, so it's also it helps me to relieve my stress and keep patience.

✓ So, it also helps me to relieve my stress and keep patient.

'Keep patience' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'keep patient' or 'remain patient'. Also, 'it's also it helps' is redundant; 'it also helps' suffices.

× No, I'm more patient than when I was a child because now I have kids, more responsibilities.

✓ No, I'm more patient now than when I was a child because I have kids and more responsibilities.

The phrase 'kids, more responsibilities' is a comma splice; it should be connected properly with 'and'. Also, 'more patient than when I was a child' is correct but adding 'now' clarifies the comparison.

× So dealing with the children, we need a lot of patience, otherwise it would lead another terrible problem.

✓ So, dealing with children, we need a lot of patience; otherwise, it would lead to another terrible problem.

'Lead another terrible problem' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, 'the children' can be simplified to 'children' for general meaning.

× So, so the learning experience makes me more.

✓ So, the learning experience has made me more patient.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs an object and verb to complete the thought, such as 'has made me more patient'.