Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, my wife often tells me that I rarely get angry. Moreover, at work, I stay calm even when others get excited, which shows my patience.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence due to grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to explain reasons, and provide specific examples to support your point.

예시: As a civil engineer, I feel impatient when contractors deliver poor-quality work. This frustrates me because it affects the safety and success of the project.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Make sure to provide a complete response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid ambiguity.

예시: I don't mind working for a long time because I am focused on completing tasks. However, sometimes I feel tired if the work is repetitive or uninteresting.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to clearly explain why your job requires patience, using specific details and logical linking words. Avoid vague or unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I often deal with difficult situations, such as negotiating with people involved in dangerous activities, which demands calmness and understanding.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a direct response with a clear topic sentence, explain your reasoning with specific details, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned to control my emotions and understand situations better as I have grown older.

× My wife often told me that I have a lot of patience and I actually I don't get angry to them.

✓ My wife often tells me that I have a lot of patience and actually I don't get angry at them.

The pronoun 'them' is used incorrectly here because it lacks a clear antecedent. Also, the preposition 'to' after 'angry' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at'. Additionally, 'told' should be 'tells' to match the present tense context.

× So I am a patient.

✓ So I am patient.

The word 'patient' is an adjective here, so the article 'a' is unnecessary and incorrect. Using 'a patient' would imply a noun meaning a person receiving medical care, which is not the intended meaning.

× when contacted do bad quality works.

✓ when contacted to do bad quality work.

The verb 'contacted' should be followed by the preposition 'to' before the infinitive verb 'do'. Also, 'works' should be singular 'work' when referring to tasks or jobs in general.

× I can't tolerate it. And then I excited.

✓ I can't tolerate it. And then I get excited.

The verb 'excited' is an adjective and cannot stand alone as a verb. The correct verb form is 'get excited' to express becoming excited. Also, 'can't' is correctly used here.

× Then my excitement goes through, comes through and I make this.

✓ Then my excitement comes through and I act on it.

The phrase 'goes through' is unclear and awkward here. 'Comes through' is acceptable, but better to say 'comes through and I act on it' to clarify the meaning. 'I make this' is incorrect and unclear.

× This kind of thing make me so much impatient.

✓ This kind of thing makes me very impatient.

The subject 'This kind of thing' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' (singular). Also, 'so much impatient' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'very' before 'impatient'.

× Actually work doesn't bother me in any kind of work.

✓ Actually, work doesn't bother me, no matter what kind of work it is.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkward. Adding a comma and rephrasing improves clarity and flow.

× It may be a long time work or my small work that I have I want to quit by minute.

✓ It may be long-term work or small tasks, but I don't want to quit even for a minute.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.

× because of this type of work is so much dangerous in our country contacted those who have who the naughty person of this of the family, so the terrorist leaders et cetera and this type of job.

✓ because this type of work is very dangerous in our country, involving contact with people who are troublesome in their families, such as terrorist leaders, etc., and this type of job.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and structural errors. 'Contacted those who have who the naughty person' is incorrect. Rephrasing to clarify meaning and correct pronoun use is necessary.

× Actually, I don't. I can't elaborate it.

✓ Actually, I don't know. I can't elaborate on it.

The phrase 'I don't' is incomplete; adding 'know' completes the thought. Also, 'elaborate' requires the preposition 'on' when followed by an object.

× I think I'm more patient now than virus or a child because.

✓ I think I'm more patient now than I was as a child because...

The word 'virus' is incorrect here, likely a mishearing or typo for 'when I was'. Also, the comparison requires a complete clause with subject and verb.

× There were feeling in my in the style. There was a feeling too.

✓ There was a feeling inside me as well.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combining and rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.