Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengucapan yang perlu diperbaiki. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, gunakan "I am a patient person, but it depends on the situation" dan hindari kata "tax" yang seharusnya "task". Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas.

예시: I am generally a patient person, but it depends on the situation. For example, when I have to complete a task for my boss, I am very strict with myself to ensure it is done well.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih natural dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan kata seperti "I I" dan gunakan bentuk kata kerja yang benar, misalnya "my subordinate does not do it well". Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat kalimat lebih koheren.

예시: I feel impatient when I am working and my subordinates do not perform their tasks properly, which can make me angry easily.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan jelas. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat. Misalnya, gunakan "I get bored easily with routine activities, so I need some changes to feel more energized."

예시: I usually feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because I get tired of routine activities. Therefore, I try to find ways to make things more interesting and energizing.

제안: Perbaiki kesalahan pengucapan dan tata bahasa, seperti "hour" yang seharusnya "a" dan kalimat yang terlalu panjang dan kurang jelas. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas dengan kata penghubung yang tepat.

예시: Yes, my job requires me to be patient because I am a human resource officer. I often deal with many people who bring various problems, so I need to listen carefully and be patient.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan kata dan filler seperti "umm" dan "uh". Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because as I grow older and face more problems in life, I have learned many things that have changed the way I think.

× It depends on what situations.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The phrase 'depends on what situations' is incorrect because 'depends on' should be followed by a singular or plural noun with an article or determiner. 'The situation' is more appropriate here to refer to a specific context. Using 'what situations' is awkward and ungrammatical in this context.

× If the situation is about work or I need to finish a task for my boss, I will be very strict toward the tax itself.

✓ If the situation is about work or I need to finish a task for my boss, I will be very strict toward the task itself.

The word 'tax' is a typo or incorrect word here; it should be 'task' to match the context. Also, 'strict toward' is acceptable but 'strict with' or 'strict about' might be more common. The main issue is the incorrect word 'tax' instead of 'task'.

× I think toward myself.

✓ I think toward myself.

This sentence fragment is incomplete and unclear. However, since it is a fragment, no grammatical correction is possible here without more context. It might be better to say 'I think I am strict toward myself.' But as per instructions, only correct mistakes that meet the problem list; this is a sentence structure issue, so no correction.

× some people just cannot do it right and I mean my subordinate will not doing it good,

✓ some people just cannot do it right and I mean my subordinate will not do it well,

The phrase 'will not doing' is incorrect; it should be 'will not do' because modal verbs like 'will' are followed by the base form of the verb. Also, 'good' is an adjective, but here an adverb 'well' is needed to modify the verb 'do'.

× then I think I I will be very impatient and can be angry easily.

✓ then I think I will be very impatient and can get angry easily.

The phrase 'can be angry easily' is awkward; 'can get angry easily' is more natural. Also, the repeated 'I I' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'I'.

× I think I will feel bored because I'm the person that very easy to be bored with a routine activity,

✓ I think I will feel bored because I'm a person who is very easily bored with routine activities,

The phrase 'very easy to be bored' is incorrect; it should be 'very easily bored' to use the adverb form modifying the adjective 'bored'. Also, 'the person that' should be 'a person who' for correct relative pronoun usage. 'Routine activity' should be plural 'routine activities' to generalize.

× so I need some changes to make me energized more so.

✓ so I need some changes to make me more energized.

The phrase 'energized more so' is awkward and incorrect. The correct form is 'more energized' with 'more' before the adjective. Also, 'changes to make me more energized' is clearer.

× Yes, it does because I'm an hour human resource officer.

✓ Yes, it does because I'm a human resource officer.

The phrase 'an hour human resource officer' is incorrect; 'hour' is unnecessary and likely a typo. The correct phrase is 'a human resource officer.' Also, 'an' should be 'a' before 'human' because 'human' starts with a consonant sound.

× So it will be very important to be patient because I will face many people and they will serve many things that maybe they are problems and I need to be very patient to listen.

✓ So it is very important to be patient because I will face many people and they will have many issues that may be problems, and I need to be very patient to listen.

The phrase 'they will serve many things' is incorrect; it should be 'they will have many issues' or 'they will bring many problems.' Also, 'maybe they are problems' is awkward; 'may be problems' is correct. The sentence is long and needs clearer phrasing.

× Yes, I am more patient now than when I were I was a child because umm, getting older and uh getting more problems in life.

✓ Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because, umm, getting older and uh getting more problems in life.

The phrase 'when I were I was a child' is incorrect; 'were' should be removed. The correct past tense form is 'when I was a child.'

× It will make you learn many things that change the way how you think.

✓ It will make you learn many things that change the way you think.

The phrase 'the way how you think' is redundant; either 'the way you think' or 'how you think' is correct. Combining both is incorrect.