Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains redundancy and some awkward phrasing. Try to be more direct and natural, and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes like 'fit in in' to 'fit in'.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially when it helps maintain harmony in busy social settings.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about what causes impatience. Also, avoid repeating 'when doing teamwork' twice.

예시: I feel impatient during teamwork when conflicting opinions arise, making it difficult to reach agreements among team members.

제안: Your answer has grammar errors and unclear phrases like 'uncharge it'. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

예시: I usually enjoy working on tasks for a long time because I am patient. For example, when I face a challenge, I stay focused and try my best to achieve good results.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammar mistakes and redundancy. Use singular/plural forms correctly ('a scholar' instead of 'a scholars') and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, try to use linking words for coherence.

예시: I am currently a student, so I don't have a job. However, being patient is important at school to maintain good relationships and expand my social circle.

제안: Your answer has many grammar and vocabulary errors, making it hard to understand. Try to use simple and clear sentences, and avoid incorrect word forms like 'brush my patients'. Focus on expressing your idea logically with linking words.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As I grow older, I understand the importance of patience for success in life, so I try to improve it continuously.

× It's definitely when doing teamwork because when doing teamwork you need to share your opinions which will sometimes bring to conflicts and agreement throughout the teams and people.

✓ It's definitely when doing teamwork because when doing teamwork you need to share your opinions which will sometimes bring conflicts and agreements throughout the teams and people.

The phrase 'bring to conflicts and agreement' is incorrect. The verb 'bring' should be followed directly by the noun without the preposition 'to'. Also, 'agreement' should be plural 'agreements' to match 'conflicts' and the context of multiple instances. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× This is a really interesting question because I'm kind of a patient person which is always enjoy doing something for a long time.

✓ This is a really interesting question because I'm kind of a patient person who always enjoys doing something for a long time.

The relative pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used for a person; 'who' is correct. Also, 'is always enjoy' is incorrect; it should be 'always enjoys' to agree with the singular subject 'person'. This correction fixes subject-verb agreement and proper relative pronoun usage.

× So whenever I have a change, I will uncharge it and try my best to, uh, do it and try to have a fruitful result.

✓ So whenever I have a chance, I will embrace it and try my best to do it and try to have a fruitful result.

The word 'change' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'chance'. The verb 'uncharge' is not appropriate here; 'embrace' or 'take' is better. Also, removing unnecessary commas improves fluency. This correction clarifies meaning and improves word choice.

× However, as a scholars I do need to have patience when I go to school in order to maintain the harmony as well as to have a great relationship with my friends and widen my circle of relationship.

✓ However, as a scholar I do need to have patience when I go to school in order to maintain harmony as well as to have great relationships with my friends and widen my circle of relationships.

The plural noun 'scholars' is incorrect when referring to oneself; it should be singular 'scholar'. Also, 'the harmony' should be 'harmony' without 'the' because it is a general concept. 'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match 'friends' and 'circle of relationships'. These corrections improve noun number agreement and article usage.

× I am definitely because when you grow older, the more you order, the more you realize that how patient, how important the patient is.

✓ I am definitely more patient because when you grow older, the more you grow older, the more you realize how patience, how important patience is.

The word 'order' is a typo and should be 'older'. The phrase 'how patient, how important the patient is' is incorrect; it should be 'how patience, how important patience is' because 'patience' is a noun here. This correction fixes spelling and noun usage errors.

× So when I grow older and the older when I in the future, I will brush my patients more and more to so that I can be success in my path in the long term.

✓ So when I grow older and older in the future, I will nurture my patience more and more so that I can be successful in my path in the long term.

The phrase 'brush my patients' is incorrect; it should be 'nurture my patience'. 'Patients' is plural of 'patient' (a person), but the intended word is 'patience' (the quality). Also, 'be success' should be 'be successful'. These corrections fix word choice and adjective usage errors.