Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, say "I am not a very patient person because I have ADHD, which makes it hard for me to wait."

예시: I am not a very patient person because I have ADHD, which makes it difficult for me to wait for things or people. I often want to know what will happen next, so waiting feels frustrating.

제안: Your answer is fragmented and has grammatical mistakes. Try to combine your ideas into complete sentences and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, "Because of my ADHD, I feel impatient in many situations, especially when I have to wait for someone for more than 10 minutes."

예시: Because of my ADHD, I feel impatient in many situations. For example, if I have to wait for someone for more than 10 minutes, it makes me feel very uncomfortable and I find it hard to stay calm.

제안: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Use a clear topic sentence and provide supporting details with correct grammar. For example, "I feel very bored when I have to do something for a long time, and often I give up after a while."

예시: I feel very bored when I have to do something for a long time. Because of that, I often lose interest and stop doing the task after some time.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat unclear. Respond directly and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I am a student, so I don't have a job. However, studying for long hours requires patience, and I need to practice it constantly."

예시: I am a student, so I don't have a job. However, studying for long periods requires a lot of patience, and I have to practice being patient regularly.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Use clear sentences and linking words to explain your point. For example, "Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned that patience is important in many situations."

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As I have grown up, I have realized that being patient is important, so I have learned how to be more patient in different situations.

× Actually, honest, neither I'm not a very patient person nor I hate patients, umm, because I have ADHD and and it's very hard for me to wait for something or someone because I want to know what's happening next and yeah, I don't have any patience in me.

✓ Actually, honestly, I'm neither a very patient person nor do I hate patients, umm, because I have ADHD and it's very hard for me to wait for something or someone because I want to know what's happening next and yeah, I don't have any patience in me.

The phrase 'neither I'm not' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'I'm neither... nor...'. Also, 'honest' should be 'honestly' as an adverb modifying the sentence. The pronoun 'I' needs to be followed by 'do' in the negative form 'nor do I hate patients' to maintain correct sentence structure.

× As a person who have ADHD, there is a lot.

✓ As a person who has ADHD, there is a lot.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'person', which is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to agree in number.

× Like more than 10 minutes. It feel me very bad and makes me impatient and I can't stand it.

✓ Like more than 10 minutes. It makes me feel very bad and makes me impatient and I can't stand it.

The phrase 'It feel me very bad' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'It makes me feel very bad' where 'makes' agrees with 'It' and 'feel' is the base verb after 'makes'.

× Actually, these occasions feel me very, very bored and I will quit to do the things after a while.

✓ Actually, these occasions make me feel very, very bored and I will quit doing the things after a while.

The verb 'feel' is incorrectly used with 'me' as object. The correct structure is 'make me feel'. Also, 'quit to do' is incorrect; the correct form is 'quit doing'.

× Actually I don't work, I'm a student, but as I candidate is required to study very much for a long time and that requires to be very patient and I need constantly to practice.

✓ Actually, I don't work, I'm a student, but as a candidate, I am required to study a lot for a long time and that requires being very patient and I need to practice constantly.

The phrase 'as I candidate' should be 'as a candidate'. Also, 'requires to be' should be 'requires being' or 'requires one to be'. 'Study very much' is better expressed as 'study a lot'. The adverb 'constantly' should be placed after 'need to practice'.

× Yes, definitely. As I mentioned, it's in my spiritual that I'm not a very patient person, but as I'm growing up I became more logic and mutual and I understand that sometimes it's required to be more patient, so I learn about it how to.

✓ Yes, definitely. As I mentioned, it's in my spirit that I'm not a very patient person, but as I grow up I become more logical and mature and I understand that sometimes it's required to be more patient, so I learn how to do it.

The phrase 'in my spiritual' is incorrect; it should be 'in my spirit'. 'Growing up' should be present tense 'grow up' to match 'I become'. 'Logic' should be 'logical' (adjective), and 'mutual' is incorrect here; 'mature' fits better. 'I learn about it how to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I learn how to do it'.