Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit contradictory and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response first, then support it with relevant reasons. Also, avoid redundancy and incorrect word usage like 'torrid feast technology' and 'fastly'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I consider myself a patient person because I can stay calm in difficult situations. However, many people today are less patient due to the fast pace of technology, which makes them expect quick results.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but can be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Try to be more specific about the problems you faced and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to wait a long time for an important event or task. For example, waiting for exam results makes me anxious, which sometimes affects my focus.

제안: Your answer has some good points but contains unclear phrases like 'reduce my success'. Make sure your supporting details are clear and relevant. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid grammatical mistakes.

예시: I feel bored when I have to do a task for a long time. Therefore, I take short breaks to refresh myself, which helps me stay focused and improve my performance.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, you can add a linking sentence explaining how your studies require patience, which will enrich your response.

예시: Currently, I am not working as I am pursuing a BCOM degree at DAV University in Jalandhar. However, my studies require a lot of patience, especially when preparing for exams and completing assignments.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors like 'get inpatient'. Try to use correct forms and add linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, explain the benefits you mentioned for clarity.

예시: I am more patient now than when I was a child. Previously, I used to get impatient and wanted things done immediately. However, now I understand situations calmly and wait patiently, which helps me make better decisions.

× people in today's era are not patient due to the introduction of torrid feast technology

✓ people in today's era are not patient due to the introduction of torrid fast technology

The phrase 'torrid feast technology' seems to be a typographical error. It should be 'torrid fast technology' or 'fast technology' to make sense. Also, 'people' is plural and correctly used here.

× they want do their work done fastly without facing any problems

✓ they want to get their work done quickly without facing any problems

After 'want', the infinitive form 'to do' is required, so 'want do' is incorrect. Also, 'fastly' is not a correct adverb; the correct form is 'quickly'.

× I usually feel impatient about the work or an event which is going to happen in future

✓ I usually feel impatient about the work or an event which is going to happen in the future

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' when referring to a specific time ahead.

× I have faced many troubles

✓ I have faced many troubles

This sentence is correct in present perfect tense; no correction needed.

× I feel very bored when I have to do something for a long time

✓ I feel very bored when I have to do something for a long time

This sentence is correct in present tense; no correction needed.

× And it also helped me to reduce my success and encourages me to do my work more perfectly

✓ And it also helps me to reduce my stress and encourages me to do my work more perfectly

The word 'success' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'stress'. Also, 'helped' should be 'helps' to maintain present tense consistency. 'More perfectly' is acceptable but 'better' might be more natural.

× Currently I am not doing any job

✓ Currently, I am not doing any job

A comma after 'Currently' improves sentence clarity.

× I remember when I was a child I usually get inpatient and I wanted the work to be done immediately

✓ I remember when I was a child I usually got impatient and I wanted the work to be done immediately

The verb 'get' should be in past tense 'got' to match the past time frame. Also, 'inpatient' is incorrect; the correct word is 'impatient'.

× But now I calmly understand the situation and patiently wait for it to happen and it has many benefits and thoughts

✓ But now I calmly understand the situation and patiently wait for it to happen, and it has many benefits and positive effects

Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence structure. 'Thoughts' is unclear here; 'positive effects' or 'advantages' is more appropriate.