Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, and then provide specific examples to support your point. Avoid redundancy and ensure correct word usage, for example, use 'patient' instead of 'patent'.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can calmly handle stressful situations, whether with my family or friends. For instance, when conflicts arise, I try to listen carefully and respond thoughtfully without getting upset.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid repetition.

예시: I feel impatient when I am in a loud and noisy environment because it distracts me and makes it hard to concentrate. For example, working in a busy café can be frustrating due to constant noise.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your feelings clearly with a topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Use simple and correct sentences to convey your message effectively.

예시: I feel satisfied when I work on a task for a long time because it allows me to gain new experiences and learn important lessons. For example, studying for exams patiently has helped me improve my knowledge.

제안: Your answer is confusing and does not directly address the question. Focus on giving a clear yes or no answer, then explain why with specific reasons. Avoid unrelated or unclear phrases and use proper sentence structure.

예시: Yes, my job requires me to be patient because I often have to deal with difficult customers. Being patient helps me stay calm and solve problems effectively.

제안: Your answer is relevant but needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I have learned the importance of patience through life experiences. For example, my family and friends have taught me that being patient helps in achieving goals and maintaining good relationships.

× Here I am a patent person because I can normally manage a stressful situation as there is in my family or in my friends.

✓ Here I am a patient person because I can normally manage a stressful situation as there is in my family or among my friends.

The word 'patent' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'patient' which means able to tolerate delays or problems without becoming annoyed. Also, 'in my friends' should be 'among my friends' to correctly express being within a group.

× That's the way I can consider that I am a patient.

✓ That's how I consider myself a patient person.

The phrase 'I can consider that I am a patient' is awkward and incorrect. The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used after 'consider' to indicate self-assessment. Also, 'patient' should be used as an adjective describing 'person'.

× According to me, there are several things that makes me a patient and patients that are.

✓ According to me, there are several things that make me patient.

The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'patients that are' is unclear and unnecessary; 'patient' is the correct adjective here.

× Firstly that there will be a loud noisy place that's totally lead to the lack of a distraction, distractions and there will be also considers as that there is a noisy place.

✓ Firstly, a loud noisy place totally leads to a lack of concentration, and it is also considered noisy.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'lead' should be 'leads' to agree with singular subject; 'lack of a distraction' is incorrect, it should be 'lack of concentration' or 'distraction'; 'there will be also considers as' is incorrect and should be rephrased to 'it is also considered'.

× I've really enjoyed performing well a long time because it helps to maintain a new experience on a very quiet patience experience that teaches me a lot of lessons and also be helpful in my life to solve.

✓ I've really enjoyed performing well for a long time because it helps me gain new experiences in patience that teach me many lessons and are also helpful in my life.

The phrase 'performing well a long time' is incorrect; it should be 'performing well for a long time'. Also, 'patience experience' is awkward; 'experiences in patience' is better. The verb 'be helpful' should be 'are helpful' to agree with plural 'lessons' and 'experiences'.

× Yes, there's jobs plays a wicked role in our satisfaction level, So if we are quite satisfactory by our salary then it has to be a patient person or if we are not then it's going to be unsurpassed night or the foundations in several conditions or it also discourage all results for.

✓ Yes, jobs play a key role in our satisfaction level. So if we are quite satisfied with our salary, then we have to be patient persons; if not, it can lead to dissatisfaction in various situations and discourage results.

'There's jobs' is incorrect; 'there are jobs' or simply 'jobs' is correct. 'Wicked role' is incorrect; 'key role' is appropriate. 'Satisfactory by our salary' should be 'satisfied with our salary'. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; it needs restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, I am a more patient person as compared to my childhood because at that time I have a not proper knowledge about the importance of occupation and now I understand and I learned a lot of lessons from my life and my family and my friends also teaches me a lot that patience is a necessary element that impacts.

✓ Yes, I am a more patient person compared to my childhood because at that time I did not have proper knowledge about the importance of occupation. Now I understand and have learned many lessons from my life, and my family and friends have also taught me that patience is a necessary element that has an impact.

'A not proper knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'did not have proper knowledge'. 'I learned' should be 'I have learned' to maintain present perfect tense. 'My friends also teaches' should be 'my friends have also taught' to agree in number and tense. The sentence is long and needs punctuation for clarity.