Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy, such as repeating 'feel' and awkward phrasing like 'complete my work efficiency'. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, keep your sentences concise and directly related to the question.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially when I have a lot of work. I stay calm and manage stress because sometimes life tests my patience with difficult tasks. This helps me focus and complete my work efficiently.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes like 'doing repair to task' and 'redo the some task'. Try to complete your answers fully and use correct sentence structures. Also, provide specific examples to support your points and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to redo tasks multiple times because I prefer to focus fully on important work. For example, when I have to revise a report several times due to frequent corrections, it becomes frustrating and tiresome.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Please try to give a complete response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and explain your feelings or thoughts about doing something for a long time.

예시: When I have to do something for a long time, I try to prepare myself mentally because long tasks require patience and focus. I usually plan my work carefully to stay motivated throughout.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing like 'we were developing a project of developing the codes'. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to support your answer.

예시: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience. For example, when we develop code and deploy projects, we often have to wait for approvals from clients and companies, which can be delayed many times.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better linking words and more natural phrasing. For example, use 'compared to' instead of 'comparing to' and add more details about how your patience has improved.

예시: Yes, compared to my childhood, I am much more patient now. I have developed the habit of being patient with others, especially because my work requires a lot of patience when dealing with people.

× I try to stay calm and manage my stress because sometimes I feel feel like life is testing my patience by giving difficult task.

✓ I try to stay calm and manage my stress because sometimes I feel like life is testing my patience by giving difficult tasks.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple difficult tasks, not just one. Using the plural form correctly matches the context of repeated challenges.

× This helps me to stay focused and complete my work efficiency.

✓ This helps me to stay focused and complete my work efficiently.

The word 'efficiency' is a noun, but here an adverb 'efficiently' is needed to describe how the work is completed. Using 'efficiently' correctly modifies the verb 'complete'.

× Doing repair to task makes me feel impatient because I prefer to complete important work with full concentration and focus.

✓ Doing repair on tasks makes me feel impatient because I prefer to complete important work with full concentration and focus.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to repairing tasks. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context.

× However, when I have to redo the some task multiple times due to frequent corrections and changes, it becomes frustrating and tiresome.

✓ However, when I have to redo some tasks multiple times due to frequent corrections and changes, it becomes frustrating and tiresome.

The phrase 'the some task' is incorrect; 'some tasks' is the correct form. 'Tasks' should be plural to indicate multiple tasks being redone.

× For example, when I have to revise a.

✓ For example, when I have to revise something.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'revise a'. Adding 'something' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Initially I decide and proceed from myself because for doing a long time procedure needs a lot of.

✓ Initially, I decide and proceed by myself because doing a long procedure needs a lot of patience.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'by myself' clarifies the subject's action, and completing the sentence with 'patience' makes it meaningful.

× Yes, for my job we need a lot of patience because when we were developing a project of developing the codes and deployment, we need to wait for lot of approvals from the client and the companies.

✓ Yes, for my job we need a lot of patience because when we were developing a project involving coding and deployment, we need to wait for a lot of approvals from the client and the companies.

The phrase 'wait for lot of approvals' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'developing a project of developing the codes' is awkward; 'involving coding' is clearer.

× Many times they do delays.

✓ Many times they cause delays.

The phrase 'do delays' is incorrect. The verb 'cause' is appropriate to indicate that they are responsible for delays.

× Yes, comparing to my childhood, now I am very patient and I developed a habit of being patient with other people because in my work we need a lot of patience with others.

✓ Yes, compared to my childhood, now I am very patient and I have developed a habit of being patient with other people because in my work we need a lot of patience with others.

The phrase 'comparing to' should be 'compared to' for correct comparison. Also, 'I developed' should be 'I have developed' to indicate a past action with present relevance.