Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, and avoid redundancy. Use simple, correct sentences and relevant vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. When I deal with difficult people, I try to stay calm and communicate politely, even if they are aggressive.

제안: Your answer is too long and somewhat confusing. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and be more specific. Also, avoid irrelevant phrases and focus on answering the question directly.

예시: I feel impatient when I have little work to do because I get bored. Also, I become impatient before interviews because I feel nervous about communicating with others.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Provide specific examples to enrich your response.

예시: I feel bored and impatient when I do the same task for a long time. However, I try to stay calm by focusing on listening carefully to others, which helps me stay patient.

제안: Your answer is good but slightly repetitive. Try to avoid repeating the same ideas and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work in customer service. I speak with many people daily, some of whom can be aggressive, so I always try to remain calm and composed.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to organise your thoughts clearly, use correct grammar, and complete your sentences. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be impatient and demanding, but now I work independently and have learned to be more calm and patient.

× Do consider myself an education person mistake whenever I had to deal with some toxic potion.

✓ I do consider myself an educated person who makes mistakes whenever I have to deal with some toxic people.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains unclear wording. 'Do consider myself' lacks the subject 'I'. 'Education person mistake' is incorrect; it should be 'educated person who makes mistakes'. 'Toxic potion' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'toxic people'. The correction clarifies the subject and object pronouns and corrects vocabulary for clarity.

× I tried to communicate with them very nicely, even they are very aggressive with me.

✓ I try to communicate with them very nicely, even when they are very aggressive with me.

The original sentence mixes past tense 'tried' with present tense 'are'. Since the context is general behaviour, present tense 'try' is appropriate. Also, 'even they are' should be 'even when they are' to connect the clauses properly.

× Sometimes having a light load makes me very impatient and along with God while I have to go for a interview, I feel very stressed and that makes me very impatient because I feel very nervous when I have to communicate with people and even with the interview.

✓ Sometimes having a light load makes me very impatient and, along with God, when I have to go for an interview, I feel very stressed and that makes me very impatient because I feel very nervous when I have to communicate with people and even during the interview.

The phrase 'along with God' is unclear but kept as is. 'Go for a interview' should be 'go for an interview' because 'interview' starts with a vowel sound. 'Even with the interview' is better expressed as 'even during the interview' to indicate time. Commas are added for clarity.

× I feel bored and impatient when I had to do same thing repeatedly.

✓ I feel bored and impatient when I have to do the same thing repeatedly.

The sentence mixes present tense 'feel' with past tense 'had'. Since the feeling is general, present tense 'have' is appropriate. Also, 'same thing' needs the definite article 'the' to be correct.

× Along also I tried to listen people very clearly so that I don't get bored.

✓ Also, I try to listen to people very clearly so that I don't get bored.

'Along also' is incorrect; 'Also' is sufficient. 'Tried' should be 'try' to match present tense context. 'Listen people' requires the preposition 'to' as in 'listen to people'.

× Yes, obviously my job requires to be very patient because I have to deal with the customers.

✓ Yes, obviously my job requires me to be very patient because I have to deal with customers.

The verb 'requires' needs an object; 'requires me to be' is correct. 'The customers' is better as 'customers' unless referring to specific customers.

× I work in a customer service department and I'll have to talk with the people on a daily basis and to talk with them.

✓ I work in a customer service department and I have to talk with people on a daily basis.

'I'll have to' implies future necessity, but the context is habitual present, so 'I have to' is correct. 'The people' is better as 'people' for general reference. The repeated phrase 'and to talk with them' is redundant and removed.

× sometimes people are very aggressive and I had to deal with some toxic people around me.

✓ Sometimes people are very aggressive and I have to deal with some toxic people around me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'are' with past tense 'had'. Since the context is habitual, present tense 'have' is appropriate.

× It's a long back but if I have to think, yes, I'm very calm and composed now in comparison to my childhood because when I was a child I was very impatient and I am very demanding when I was a kid.

✓ It's a long time ago but if I have to think, yes, I'm very calm and composed now in comparison to my childhood because when I was a child I was very impatient and I was very demanding when I was a kid.

'It's a long back' is incorrect; 'It's a long time ago' is correct. The sentence mixes present 'I am very demanding' with past context; it should be past tense 'I was very demanding' to match the time frame.

× So now I work by myself and I try to be more patient Com maybe because.

✓ So now I work by myself and I try to be more patient, maybe because of that.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'Com maybe because' which is unclear and incomplete. The correction completes the thought with 'maybe because of that' to make a coherent sentence.