Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不清晰，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意时态和句子结构。例如，可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持观点。

예시: Yes, I am usually a patient person, especially when I am working. I focus on my tasks and try to overcome any difficulties calmly.

제안: 回答不够清楚，表达含糊。建议明确说明让你感到不耐烦的具体情况，并用完整句子表达。

예시: I feel impatient when there are unexpected noises that distract me from my work.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和不完整句子，建议用连贯的句子表达你的感受和做法，避免重复。

예시: When I have to do something for a long time, I clear my mind and focus all my attention on the task to maintain concentration.

제안: 回答不完整且语法混乱，建议用完整句子说明工作需要耐心的原因，并举例说明。

예시: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I need to communicate with many people from different departments to ensure smooth cooperation.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但语言稍显复杂且有语法错误。建议简化表达，清晰说明原因。

예시: I don't think I am more patient now than when I was a child because as an adult, I have many desires and worries that distract me.

× You Most of the time I'm a patient person, especially when I was aware I am working and I always. Focus my or concentration on my work and I can overcome all the active difficulties.

✓ Most of the time I'm a patient person, especially when I am aware I am working and I always focus my concentration on my work and I can overcome all the active difficulties.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and sentence structure. 'You' at the beginning is unnecessary. 'Was aware' should be 'am aware' to match the present tense context. 'Focus my or concentration' is incorrect; it should be 'focus my concentration'. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be combined properly.

× If there are any new easy sound I would be patient.

✓ If there is any new easy sound, I would be patient.

The phrase 'any new easy sound' is awkward; 'easy' is not appropriate to describe 'sound' here. Also, 'are' should be 'is' because 'sound' is singular. A comma is needed after the conditional clause.

× Before I starting, before I start to do these things, I will clean my mind and keep all my attention and focused on the things I have to do and then I concentrate on it and. Anne.

✓ Before I start to do these things, I will clear my mind, keep all my attention, and focus on the things I have to do, then I concentrate on them.

'Before I starting' is incorrect; it should be 'Before I start'. The sentence is fragmented and contains an incomplete phrase 'and. Anne.' which seems to be an error. 'Clean my mind' is better expressed as 'clear my mind'. The sentence needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes my job I have a a patient is a patient demanding job because I have to communicate a ways many people from different apart department.

✓ Yes, my job is a patient-demanding job because I have to communicate with many people from different departments.

The phrase 'a a patient is a patient demanding job' is incorrect and redundant. It should be 'my job is a patient-demanding job'. 'A ways many people' is incorrect; it should be 'with many people'. 'Different apart department' is incorrect; it should be 'different departments'.

× So I have to keep cop and communicate with each person to make sure our.

✓ So I have to keep calm and communicate with each person to make sure our work is done properly.

'Keep cop' is likely a typo for 'keep calm'. The sentence is incomplete; it should be completed for clarity. The preposition 'with' is correctly used here.

× I think no, when I was a child I don't have to think too much, but now I have too much desires.

✓ I think no, when I was a child I didn't have to think too much, but now I have too many desires.

'Don't have' should be 'didn't have' to match the past tense 'when I was a child'. 'Too much desires' is incorrect; 'desires' is countable, so it should be 'too many desires'.

× So uh, this distracting destructive ideas often disturbs me and makes me not so pure as I was a child.

✓ So, these distracting and destructive ideas often disturb me and make me not as pure as I was a child.

'This' should be 'these' to agree with plural 'ideas'. 'Distracting destructive ideas' needs 'and' to connect adjectives properly. 'Disturbs' should be 'disturb' to agree with plural subject. 'Makes me not so pure as I was a child' is better expressed as 'make me not as pure as I was a child'.