Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about how being patient helps in your nursing role.

예시: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because during my nursing studies, I learned that patience is essential when caring for patients. For example, being patient allows me to show empathy and support to those who are ill, which helps them feel more comfortable.

제안: Improve your answer by organizing your thoughts clearly and using correct grammar. Avoid repeating phrases and provide a concise example with linking words to explain your feelings.

예시: I used to feel impatient when my clinical instructor insisted I was wrong, even though I was confident about my time tracking. This made me want to speak up and explain my side, but it was frustrating when she didn't listen.

제안: Work on fluency and sentence structure to make your answer more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about why long tasks are tiring for you.

예시: When I have to do something for a long time, I feel very drained because it is hard to maintain focus. For instance, during my nursing studies, long hours of studying made me mentally exhausted.

제안: Make your answer more fluent by correcting grammar and using linking words. Be more specific about how patience is important in nursing and give a clear example.

예시: Yes, nursing definitely requires patience because we need to provide holistic care. For example, staying calm and understanding patients' needs helps build trust and improves their recovery.

제안: Improve clarity and grammar in your answer. Use linking words to explain the reason for your increased patience and provide a specific example related to your profession.

예시: I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child because my experience as a registered nurse has taught me to stay calm in difficult situations. For instance, dealing with patients requires me to be understanding and composed.

× I have learned this when I was still a nursing student.

✓ I learned this when I was still a nursing student.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present perfect tense 'have learned' with a specific past time 'when I was still a nursing student'. In English, the simple past tense 'learned' should be used for actions completed at a definite time in the past.

× So we are thought to be patient to our patience because this is.

✓ So we are taught to be patient with our patients because of this.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'patient'. The correct preposition is 'with' when referring to being patient towards someone. Also, 'patience' (the quality) is confused with 'patients' (people receiving care). Additionally, 'thought' is a misspelling of 'taught'.

× In this way, we can show empathy and sympathy through our patient by waiting for them or giving them patience because they have illnesses.

✓ In this way, we can show empathy and sympathy towards our patients by waiting for them or giving them patience because they have illnesses.

The word 'patient' is incorrectly used as a noun in singular form; it should be plural 'patients' to refer to multiple people. Also, 'through' is better replaced with 'towards' to express direction of feelings.

× An I want to voice out things and I want to say that I am right.

✓ And I want to voice out things and say that I am right.

The sentence starts with 'An' which is a typo for 'And'. Also, 'voice out' is informal; 'speak up' or 'express' is better, but since only grammar correction is requested, the typo is corrected.

× Like for example, I am right about my time tracking but she is insisting that I am not and that.

✓ For example, I am right about my time tracking but she insists that I am not.

The phrase 'Like for example' is redundant; 'For example' suffices. Also, 'insisting' should be 'insists' to agree with the subject 'she' in present tense.

× What I feel when I have to do something for a long time is. It makes me. Really draining, I feel like it's. Draining myself, draining my brain.

✓ What I feel when I have to do something for a long time is that it makes me really drained; I feel like it drains me, drains my brain.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. They need to be combined into a coherent sentence. Also, 'draining myself' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it drains me' or 'I feel drained'.

× Yes, I do think that nurses requires. Us to be patient and it is because we are thought to give holistic care and that includes to be calm when talking to patient and to always understand the patient with whatever the situation is.

✓ Yes, I do think that nurses require us to be patient and it is because we are taught to give holistic care and that includes being calm when talking to patients and always understanding the patient whatever the situation is.

'Requires' should be 'require' to agree with plural 'nurses'. 'Thought' is a misspelling of 'taught'. 'To be calm' should be 'being calm' to fit the structure. 'Patient' should be plural 'patients' when referring generally.

× I'm definitely patient now. When? Then we then when I was a child and I can say that because of my current profession which is I am a registered nurse.

✓ I'm definitely more patient now than when I was a child and I can say that because of my current profession as a registered nurse.

The sentence has unnecessary words 'When? Then we then' which are confusing and incorrect. 'More patient now than when I was a child' is the correct comparative structure. 'Which is I am a registered nurse' should be 'as a registered nurse'.

× So I can say that I am now patient then when I was a child because I am now calm and because I am taught to become when I was still a nursing student and that is why.

✓ So I can say that I am more patient now than when I was a child because I am now calm and because I was taught to become patient when I was still a nursing student, and that is why.

'Patient then when I was a child' should be 'more patient now than when I was a child' for correct comparison. 'I am taught' should be past tense 'I was taught' to match the past time. The sentence is completed with 'patient' after 'become'.