Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas.

예시: No, I am not a patient person. I usually want to solve problems quickly because I feel anxious when things take too long. For example, I get nervous if I have to wait in long lines.

제안: Your answer is very unclear and difficult to understand. Focus on giving a direct answer with clear reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: I feel impatient when I have to wait for someone who is late. For instance, if a friend is late to meet me, I get anxious because I don't like wasting time.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clear structure. Try to state your feelings directly and explain why you feel that way with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: When I have to do something for a long time, I feel tired and frustrated. For example, if I have to study for many hours, I lose focus and want to take a break.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Answer the question directly and provide reasons or examples. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, most jobs require patience, but I am an impatient person. Therefore, I plan to start my own business so I can work independently without waiting for others.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammar and unclear expressions. Try to give a clear and direct response, then explain with specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: No, I am still impatient now, just like when I was a child. I always want to do things quickly and get results immediately. For example, I don't like waiting for others to finish their tasks.

× I have no present for avoiding social long time

✓ I have no patience for avoiding social situations for a long time

The word 'present' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'patience'. Also, 'social' should be followed by a noun like 'situations' to make sense. 'Long time' should be preceded by 'for' to indicate duration.

× I'm just exciting hot snakes an it's make me feel worried

✓ I'm just excited, hot snakes and it makes me feel worried

The word 'exciting' should be 'excited' to describe the person's feeling. 'Hot snakes' seems incorrect or nonsensical; possibly a mishearing or error. 'It's make' should be 'it makes' to agree with the singular subject.

× 8 so make me feel impression is kind of thing that. Who is suspend? Tiler Anne? I wanna know. Curious about to know that kind of thing.

✓ So, what makes me feel impatient is a kind of thing that... Who is supposed to wait? I want to know. I'm curious to know that kind of thing.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. '8' is likely a mishearing or typo. 'Impression' should be 'impatient'. 'Who is suspend?' should be 'Who is supposed to wait?'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× I have no person to wait for long so I wanna. North.

✓ I have no one to wait for a long time, so I want to move on.

'No person' is better expressed as 'no one'. 'Wait for long' should be 'wait for a long time'. 'I wanna. North.' is unclear; likely intended as 'I want to move on' or similar.

× It's make me feel like I'm a strong in some kind of. ADA, So I'm not doing this kind of thing anymore again.

✓ It makes me feel like I'm strong in some way. So I'm not doing this kind of thing anymore.

'It's make' should be 'It makes' for subject-verb agreement. 'I'm a strong' is incorrect; 'I'm strong' is correct. 'ADA' is unclear and likely an error. 'Anymore again' is redundant; use either 'anymore' or 'again'.

× I feel is strong and I wanna. Get on from this an al going to do this.

✓ I feel strong and I want to get on from this and I'm going to do this.

'I feel is strong' should be 'I feel strong'. 'Wanna' should be 'want to'. 'An al' is unclear; likely 'and I'm'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× Is every kind of job require? To be patient but I'ma impatient person so.

✓ Every kind of job requires patience, but I'm an impatient person, so...

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Is every kind of job require?' should be 'Every kind of job requires'. 'I'ma' should be 'I'm an'. The sentence is incomplete and needs proper punctuation.

× I don't think I'm gonna be doing any kind of job. With others, I'm going to make my own business to run, so I had no person.

✓ I don't think I'm going to be doing any kind of job with others. I'm going to run my own business, so I have no partner.

'Gonna' should be 'going to' in formal speech. 'Had no person' is incorrect; 'have no partner' or 'have no one' is better. Sentence fragments need to be combined properly.

× No, I'm is still not pay. St. Ann is still impatient person.

✓ No, I am still not patient. I am still an impatient person.

'I'm is' is incorrect; should be 'I am'. 'Not pay' should be 'not patient'. 'St. Ann' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'still an'.

× I want to. Do anything anyhow. So if I wanna do something right now, I wanna do this kind of thing. If someone into it will mean this kind of thing.

✓ I want to do anything quickly. So if I want to do something right now, I want to do it immediately. If someone interferes, it will mean this kind of thing.

Sentence fragments need to be combined. 'Anyhow' is informal and unclear here; 'quickly' fits better. 'Wanna' should be 'want to'. The last sentence is unclear and needs clarification.