Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will improve your answer's naturalness.

예시: I am not a very patient person because I tend to get angry quickly. This might be due to my family's temperament, as my parents and grandparents also had similar traits. However, I am trying to improve by practicing yoga and meditation to control my anger.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Focus on giving specific reasons for your impatience, use linking words to organize your ideas, and avoid repetition. Try to use appropriate vocabulary to express your feelings clearly.

예시: I feel impatient when things do not go as planned. For example, I get frustrated when my daughter does not complete her studies properly or when my husband is busy and cannot help with household tasks.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and repetitive. Try to clearly state your feelings about long tasks, use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use precise vocabulary to describe your emotions.

예시: I don't mind doing something for a long time if it is interesting. However, if the task is difficult or boring, I often feel frustrated and sometimes angry.

제안: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then explain why patience is important in teaching. Use linking words and correct grammar to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: I don't have a job at the moment, but I am training to become a teacher. Teaching requires a lot of patience because teachers need to support students' learning processes. Therefore, I am working hard to improve my patience.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information. Focus on directly comparing your patience now and in childhood, provide reasons, and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: I was more patient as a child because I had fewer responsibilities. However, after marriage, I became more responsible and sometimes more impatient due to stress and other factors.

× Obviously I don't I don't have much more patience.

✓ Obviously, I don't have much patience.

The sentence incorrectly repeats 'I don't' and uses 'much more patience' which is not appropriate here. The correct form is 'I don't have much patience' to express a general present state.

× Sometimes I'm a sudden aggressive person.

✓ Sometimes I'm a suddenly aggressive person.

The adjective 'sudden' should be changed to the adverb 'suddenly' to correctly modify the adjective 'aggressive' describing how the person behaves.

× My answers test my parents.

✓ My ancestors are my parents.

The original sentence is unclear and likely a mistranslation. Assuming the intended meaning is about family lineage, 'My ancestors are my parents' or 'My parents are my ancestors' is more appropriate. However, this sentence may need clarification from the speaker.

× My grandparents were like that sudden anger will comes because of some genetic probe lighting.

✓ My grandparents were like that; sudden anger would come because of some genetic problem.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'will comes' should be 'would come' (modal verb and verb agreement), 'probe lighting' is likely a mishearing of 'problem'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× So one of the worst habit in our life this way and practicing yoga meditation to control my.

✓ So one of the worst habits in our life is this way, and I practice yoga and meditation to control it.

The singular 'habit' should be plural 'habits' because 'one of the' requires plural noun. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs a verb to be grammatically correct.

× Whenever something happened at that I really don't like when I see something I don't like men, I become very anchor.

✓ Whenever something happens that I really don't like, when I see something I don't like, I become very angry.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Happened' should be 'happens' to match the habitual present context. 'Anchor' is a mispronunciation of 'angry'.

× Usually I become angry towards my daughter whenever she hasn't visitation to study and she's not doing her work accurately and towards my husband also he's whenever he is busy with the histone task then known contributing it.

✓ Usually, I become angry towards my daughter whenever she doesn't have time to study and she's not doing her work accurately, and towards my husband also when he is busy with his tasks and not contributing.

The sentence has pronoun errors ('hasn't visitation' should be 'doesn't have time'), and unclear phrases ('histone task' likely 'his own task'). Correcting pronouns and clarifying meaning improves grammar and comprehension.

× If it's a very interesting, but as I don't feel anything, I don't have any kind of hesitation while doing interesting an interesting task.

✓ If it's very interesting, I don't feel anything; I don't have any hesitation while doing an interesting task.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'but as' and has redundancy ('interesting an interesting'). Removing unnecessary conjunctions and repetition improves clarity.

× I'm Kobe, whenever I I want to I should do something really hard.

✓ I'm okay; whenever I want to, I should do something really hard.

'Kobe' is likely a mispronunciation of 'okay'. The sentence also has repeated 'I' and awkward phrasing. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× I would feel really I would feel very difficult.

✓ I would feel that it is very difficult.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Adding 'that it is' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Sometimes I refilled aggressive and angry towards that, towards the work like that.

✓ Sometimes I feel aggressive and angry towards the work like that.

'Refilled' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'feel'. Removing unnecessary words improves clarity.

× Currently I don't have any kind of job, but I am pursuing to become a teacher.

✓ Currently, I don't have any kind of job, but I am pursuing becoming a teacher.

The verb 'pursuing' should be followed by a gerund ('becoming') rather than an infinitive ('to become'). This is the correct verb pattern.

× Currently impulsing may be able to pick up my teacher.

✓ Currently, I am pursuing and may be able to become a teacher.

'Impulsing' is a mispronunciation of 'pursuing'. The sentence is unclear and needs correction to express the intended meaning.

× Teaching profession is one of the most important profession that's need patient.

✓ The teaching profession is one of the most important professions that need patience.

'Profession' should be plural 'professions' after 'one of the most important'. Also, 'patient' should be 'patience' (noun) to express the quality needed.

× Patience is the most relevant thing the teacher must work process.

✓ Patience is the most relevant thing in the teaching process.

The phrase 'the teacher must work process' is incorrect. It should be 'in the teaching process' to convey the intended meaning.

× That's why I'm controlling my try to control my patient.

✓ That's why I'm trying to control my patience.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect phrases. 'Controlling my try' is incorrect; it should be 'trying to control'. Also, 'patient' should be 'patience'.

× I'm hard to become impatient patient individual.

✓ It's hard for me to become a patient individual.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Correcting the structure and word choice clarifies the meaning.

× I think when I was a child I was quite common not much accuracy like this, but after my marriage and after I become more responsible person and I become more aggressive is because of some I think the the anchor and everything is related to over hormone production or the situation that we are currently leading in Iowa zip file.

✓ I think when I was a child, I was quite calm, not as intense as now, but after my marriage, I became a more responsible person and more aggressive because I think the anger and everything is related to hormone overproduction or the situation we are currently living in.

The sentence has multiple tense errors and unclear words ('common' should be 'calm', 'anchor' is 'anger', 'leading in Iowa zip file' is unclear and corrected to 'living in'). Correcting tense and word choice improves clarity.

× I didn't have any much of any kind of responsibility and free minded person that's why.

✓ I didn't have much responsibility and was a free-minded person; that's why.

The phrase 'any much of any kind' is incorrect; 'much responsibility' is correct. Also, the sentence needs proper verb and punctuation for clarity.