Patience— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意句子结构，避免断句不完整，同时用词要准确。可以尝试用更连贯的句子表达自己的观点。

예시: No, I am not a patient person, especially when I teach my little brother and sister. When they don't listen to me carefully, I get angry and sometimes even scold them. I realize that I need to change this attitude.

제안: 回答不连贯且有多处语法错误，建议练习用完整句子表达原因，并使用连接词使回答更流畅。

예시: As I mentioned before, I feel impatient when my little brother and sister don't listen to me carefully. Also, I become impatient when I have disagreements with others.

제안: 回答中有很多语法和拼写错误，表达不清晰。建议用简单明了的句子描述感受，并注意拼写和语法的准确性。

예시: At first, I feel tired and a little impatient when I have to do something for a long time. However, as I continue, I start to enjoy it and become more focused.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，建议使用正确的时态和词汇，句子结构要完整。

예시: Although I don't have a job now, I think patience will be very important in my future work. If you become impatient, it might affect your performance and even lead to losing your job.

제안: 回答不连贯且语法错误较多，建议用完整句子表达对比，并注意逻辑连贯性。

예시: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. When I was young, I would get angry and sometimes break things over small issues. But now, I try to be more patient and calm.

× When they didn't listen me carefully.

✓ When they didn't listen to me carefully.

动词listen后面需要加介词to，表示“听某人”。原句缺少介词to，导致语法错误。

× I will mad with them and even a well.

✓ I will get mad with them and even yell.

表达“生气”应使用动词get mad，且“even a well”应为“even yell”，原句用词错误，导致意思不清。

× Then my little brother and my sister didn't. Listen me carefully.

✓ Then my little brother and my sister didn't listen to me carefully.

同样，listen后面需要加介词to，原句缺少to，语法错误。

× Or also. When I have this build with others, we don't we have disagreements with each other.

✓ Also, when I have this build with others, we have disagreements with each other.

句中“we don't we have”重复且不合适，应去掉“don't we”，使句子通顺。

× And the first time I feel tired.

✓ At first, I feel tired.

“And the first time”结构不正确，应改为“At first”表示“起初”。

× During. Depere Rd. I did the things.

✓ During the period, I did the things.

“Depere Rd.”应为“the period”，表示“期间”，原句拼写错误且缺少冠词。

× I just feel I'm enjoyable and I'm emerged in late.

✓ I just feel I'm enjoying it and I'm immersed in it.

“I'm enjoyable”应为“I'm enjoying it”，“I'm emerged in late”应为“I'm immersed in it”，原句用词错误，导致表达不清。

× Although I don't have a job now. I thought if I have a job of you in the future.

✓ Although I don't have a job now, I think if I have a job in the future.

“I thought”时态不合适，应为“I think”；“a job of you”错误，应为“a job”；句子连接应用逗号。

× I think a patient is very important when you do your works.

✓ I think patience is very important when you do your work.

“a patient”错误，应为不可数名词“patience”；“works”应为不可数名词“work”。

× Because if you become impatient, you may be fired.

✓ Because if you become impatient, you might be fired.

“may”表示可能性，“might”更符合假设语气，表达更准确。

× If a little thing. Didn't mean to. Consistent with my conscientiousness.

✓ If a little thing didn't go as I expected.

原句结构混乱，时态和表达不正确，应改为完整的过去时句子。

× I will get angry and broken things, but now?

✓ I would get angry and break things, but now?

描述过去习惯用would，动词break应为原形，原句时态和动词形式错误。

× I just to. Being more patient.

✓ I have become more patient.

“I just to. Being more patient.”结构不完整且错误，应改为“I have become more patient.”表示现在完成时。