Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a slightly fuller response with a topic sentence and one brief reason or habit detail. Use a linking word to connect the time with the reason to make it more natural (e.g., "because" or "so"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually have a snack around 3:00 to 4:00 PM because I need a little energy between lunch and dinner. For example, I often grab a piece of fruit or some yogurt to keep me going until dinner.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") and correct grammar ("what I eat", "if I eat junk food"). Provide one specific example of a healthy and an unhealthy snack.

예시: I think it depends on what I eat. For example, unhealthy snacks like chips or candy are bad for me because they have a lot of sugar and fat; however, fruits or raw vegetables are healthy and give me quick energy.

제안: Use correct past tense consistently and a topic sentence. Add one specific memory or example and a linking word (e.g., "because", "for example") to make the answer more vivid and coherent.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child because my mother would prepare small plates of fruit and homemade treats. For example, she used to cut apples and carrots for me after school.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite snacks, then give 1–2 specific examples and a short reason why you like them. Avoid vague words like "stuffs"; use precise vocabulary.

예시: I like eating fresh vegetable salads and fruit as snacks. For instance, I enjoy a cucumber-and-tomato salad with a little vinegar, salt and pepper because it is refreshing and low in calories.

× I eat snacks around 3:00 to 4:00 PM.

✓ I usually eat snacks around 3:00 or 4:00 PM.

The original sentence is understandable but awkward: 'around 3:00 to 4:00 PM' mixes 'around' with a range. Use 'around 3:00 or 4:00 PM' or 'between 3:00 and 4:00 PM.' Also add 'usually' to match the question about usual habit. Suggestion: use consistent time expression and an adverb of frequency for clarity.

× It depends on what am I eating, especially if I ate junk foods it's not good for me.

✓ It depends on what I am eating; especially if I eat junk food, it's not good for me.

The clause 'what am I eating' uses incorrect word order for an indirect question; correct is 'what I am eating.' Tense was mixed ('ate' past vs present habitual); because the question asks about health in general, use present simple 'eat.' 'Junk foods' is uncountable in this context, so use 'junk food.' Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× But sometimes I eat fruits or veggies to fulfill my stomach and gain some energy.

✓ But sometimes I eat fruit or vegetables to fill my stomach and get some energy.

Use singular uncountable 'fruit' or plural 'fruits' depending on meaning; 'fruit' as a food type is more natural. 'Veggies' is informal; use 'vegetables.' 'Fulfill my stomach' is incorrect collocation; use 'fill my stomach.' 'Gain some energy' is grammatical but 'get some energy' is more natural in this context.

× I often eat snacks when I was a kid, especially if moms cook some delicious foods or cut or prepare some veggies and fruits for me.

✓ I often ate snacks when I was a kid, especially when my mom cooked something delicious or prepared vegetables and fruit for me.

The time clause 'when I was a kid' sets past time, so the verb should be past tense 'ate' not present 'eat' (present tense issue). 'Moms' is incorrect; use 'my mom' or 'my parents.' 'Cook some delicious foods' is awkward; use 'cooked something delicious.' 'Cut or prepare some veggies and fruits' is wordy—use 'prepared vegetables and fruit.' Adjust pronoun and verb tense to match past time.

× I like to eat cucumber salad with tomatoes, vinegar, salt and pepper, carrots and other stuffs, the other veggies and fruits.

✓ I like to eat cucumber salad with tomatoes, vinegar, salt and pepper, carrots, and other vegetables and fruit.

'Other stuffs' is uncountable and informal; use 'other things' or specifically 'other vegetables and fruit.' 'Veggies' is informal; use 'vegetables.' Also streamline the list with proper commas. Use 'fruit' as a mass noun when listing types of produce.