Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and make your answer more concise and clear. Start with a direct response to the question, then add a reason or detail using linking words for coherence.

예시: I usually eat snacks after lunchtime because I gained some weight as I grew up, so I avoid eating in the evening like I did when I was a child.

제안: Avoid incomplete sentences and filler words. Provide a clear opinion and explain it with specific details using linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I don't think snacking is very healthy for me because I tend to gain weight easily. Therefore, I limit myself to eating chocolate bars only once a week after lunch.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and use more natural expressions. Also, clarify your ideas with logical linking words and avoid awkward phrases like 'my tooth fairy will get angry'.

예시: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate and candy when I was young. My mom often scolded me because she was worried about my teeth getting damaged.

제안: Use more varied vocabulary and avoid repeating the same word like 'love'. Also, try to combine sentences using linking words for better flow.

예시: I really enjoy eating chocolates and candies because of their sweet taste. However, I dislike sour snacks as they are not appealing to me.

× Umm, when I was a child I loved eating at the evening, but umm, as I grew up I started to gain a little weight so I prefer umm snacking after lunchtime.

✓ Umm, when I was a child I loved eating in the evening, but umm, as I grew up I started to gain a little weight so I prefer umm snacking after lunchtime.

The phrase 'at the evening' is incorrect because 'evening' as a time of day usually takes the preposition 'in'. The correct phrase is 'in the evening'. This is a preposition usage error (ID 11).

× Personally, I think my body is umm tend to gain weight so I prefer not to snack all the time.

✓ Personally, I think my body tends to gain weight so I prefer not to snack all the time.

The phrase 'my body is tend to gain weight' is incorrect because 'tend' should be used as a verb agreeing with the subject. The correct form is 'my body tends to gain weight'. The auxiliary verb 'is' is unnecessary here. This is a subject-verb agreement and verb form error (ID 27 and 8).

× Just once a week after lunch I eat 2 chocolate bars and then I continue my.

✓ Just once a week after lunch I eat 2 chocolate bars and then I continue my day.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'I continue my' which is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'day' completes the sentence logically. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Yes, I was eating a lot of umm, chocolate and candy when I was young umm, and often my mom would raise her voice to me to stop eating so much candy because my tooth fairy will get angry.

✓ Yes, I ate a lot of umm, chocolate and candy when I was young umm, and often my mom would raise her voice to me to stop eating so much candy because the tooth fairy would get angry.

The phrase 'I was eating' is better replaced with simple past 'I ate' to describe habitual past action. Also, 'my tooth fairy will get angry' should be 'the tooth fairy would get angry' to maintain past tense consistency and correct article usage. This involves past tense issue (ID 5) and article errors (ID 22).

× First of all, I like chocolates very much and I love to eat candy because I love it's sweet taste.

✓ First of all, I like chocolates very much and I love to eat candy because I love its sweet taste.

The word 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has', but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to indicate possession. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).